Pearls (Shape Poem)

A learning experiment. Edited slightly.

PEARLS

 A 

dew

 drop 

 in the 

morning 

and pearls 

 in her eyes, at 

the same time ,

glistened smooth as 

pearly white shadows 

emerged, over-shadowing 

everything. A faint half smile 

crossed the sun's ever - young 

face as an arc of magenta shades 

enveloped her very essence;   the 

tears that followed, soon washed 

away every doubt that she had  

harboured in her stoned, 

marble heart

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Another adventure
in a brand new form,
to spread your wings
much higher than norm.

Sheer eye-candy, so beautifully built and presented, dear poetess … this is the epitome of elegance in visual and emotional poetic bliss.
Deeply imaginative and heart touching, your poetic imagery and Concrete image compliment each the other with equal grace, and that picture … OMG, it's scrumptiously gorgeous to the mind's-eye, setting a perfect ambience for your moment.

What a pleasure it is, YumnaKay, to enjoy your every new effort … KUDOS! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D and you, of all people, know that I'll be bugging you for a long time to teach me new poetic forms hahah
Thank you so much, Richard! I'm humbled by your appreciation. 🌺🍃💜

[Vivian Gospel]

I should try this form sometime.

[Ardra]

tears that followed, soon washed
away every doubt that she had
harboured in her stoned,
marble heart

love those lines...and very beautifully done Yumna...
it has a classic feel to it like the pearls...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one. Glad you like it. :)

[Lavi]

I love shaped poems. The only one I've never liked is the Girls are Like Apples tree-shaped poem. And that was just because as awesome as it looks, it's meaning was a bit... itemized.

But this poem is just beautiful and the way you mixed the colors in looks amazing. Very immersive for us readers. Overall, good work. I admire this, really. I myself could not be so original when it comes to shape poems like this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I love your review on this piece. This was a first attempt in writing a shape poem but I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much, Lavi. 😊

[Vivian Gospel]

Nicely done Yumna. Shape of the tear, the flow of tear drops from a marble heart.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Vivian. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

excellent! you have told a complete story, defined the character and drew me in with the shape and title ..instantly .. i had to read several times as the first time through I could not help but be distracted by that shape and the colors and the dew. its like your protagonist wakens to a spectacular sunrise but she sees it so differently ...anchored it seems to that marble heart ... even the marbling is a conundrum for her it is beautiful and so smooth....but cold and as hard a stone anchor can be.... bravo for working so hard at the shape ... and filling it with words trimmed with skill and purpose ... tho you did "cheat" here and there ... i forgive you as the shape and poem are fine indeed! bravo says i!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I actually feel relieved that someone noticed my cheating here and reprimanded me for that! (in a good way) ;) I was afraid the meaning of the words might get lost in the shape, glad it wasn't so for you.
Thank you so much for reading and considering this piece in depth, Einstein. Very much appreciated. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i just read this one about pearls also..thought you might like it ... http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Chelsea-Franklin/2056865/#comments

[emmajoy]

Thia could be my chosen favourite of yours. The words you've laid in such a beautiful and unique way just trickle into a delicate harmony of phrases. Finding the words I need to describe how this post makes me feel: mesmerised, calm as calm, perhaps. What- and whichever, this is near perfect.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Knowing that this piece made you feel calm makes me happy. :)
I was more aiming for the shape of this poem than the words which I wrote, but I'm glad you like them both.
Thank you so much for your lovely review, Em. Always appreciated. x

[emmajoy]

It's as near a sigh of words a poem could be, Yumna.

[Onlyme]

Aw, this was so sweet and true for me of late. Bless you, Dr Yumnakay for sharing your beautiful poem.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Dawn. Blessings. x

[Chris Shaw]

Simply stunning. You have created wonderful poetic imagery here Dr Y. Well done.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Christine! :-)

[lightsong]

fantastic Yumna, You are a really amazing and very talented poetess, not only by taking any form and make it into a wonderful pleasurable read, but also with how You paint emotions, You do it perfectly.

beauty to the eyes, heart and mind, Thank You my dear!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your lovely words here made me smile. Thank you so much for the appreciation, dear Light. I'm humbled 💜

[sette]

wow i like the pearl shape the words in the pearl shape and the message so clear

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for liking this one, sette. Truly appreciate your words here :))

[¿]

Woww!😯.....this stunned me hair to toe!
Your efforts got wings Doctor....tis encouraging and inspiring to give this type o writing a try...
Spectacular! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Glad to get the little poetess stunned hahah
Thanks so much for reading and appreciating this one, Tahsin! :))

[¿]

You're welcome!! :)