Another adventure
in a brand new form,
to spread your wings
much higher than norm.
Sheer eye-candy, so beautifully built and presented, dear poetess … this is the epitome of elegance in visual and emotional poetic bliss.
Deeply imaginative and heart touching, your poetic imagery and Concrete image compliment each the other with equal grace, and that picture … OMG, it's scrumptiously gorgeous to the mind's-eye, setting a perfect ambience for your moment.
What a pleasure it is, YumnaKay, to enjoy your every new effort … KUDOS! ⁓ Richard : )
:D and you, of all people, know that I'll be bugging you for a long time to teach me new poetic form.. read more:D and you, of all people, know that I'll be bugging you for a long time to teach me new poetic forms hahah
Thank you so much, Richard! I'm humbled by your appreciation. 🌺🍃💜
I love shaped poems. The only one I've never liked is the Girls are Like Apples tree-shaped poem. And that was just because as awesome as it looks, it's meaning was a bit... itemized.
But this poem is just beautiful and the way you mixed the colors in looks amazing. Very immersive for us readers. Overall, good work. I admire this, really. I myself could not be so original when it comes to shape poems like this.
I love your review on this piece. This was a first attempt in writing a shape poem but I'm glad you .. read moreI love your review on this piece. This was a first attempt in writing a shape poem but I'm glad you like it. Thank you so much, Lavi. 😊
excellent! you have told a complete story, defined the character and drew me in with the shape and title ..instantly .. i had to read several times as the first time through I could not help but be distracted by that shape and the colors and the dew. its like your protagonist wakens to a spectacular sunrise but she sees it so differently ...anchored it seems to that marble heart ... even the marbling is a conundrum for her it is beautiful and so smooth....but cold and as hard a stone anchor can be.... bravo for working so hard at the shape ... and filling it with words trimmed with skill and purpose ... tho you did "cheat" here and there ... i forgive you as the shape and poem are fine indeed! bravo says i!
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I actually feel relieved that someone noticed my cheating here and reprimanded me for that! (in a go.. read moreI actually feel relieved that someone noticed my cheating here and reprimanded me for that! (in a good way) ;) I was afraid the meaning of the words might get lost in the shape, glad it wasn't so for you.
Thank you so much for reading and considering this piece in depth, Einstein. Very much appreciated. :)
6 Years Ago
i just read this one about pearls also..thought you might like it ... http://www.writerscafe.org/wri.. read morei just read this one about pearls also..thought you might like it ... http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Chelsea-Franklin/2056865/#comments
Thia could be my chosen favourite of yours. The words you've laid in such a beautiful and unique way just trickle into a delicate harmony of phrases. Finding the words I need to describe how this post makes me feel: mesmerised, calm as calm, perhaps. What- and whichever, this is near perfect.
Knowing that this piece made you feel calm makes me happy. :)
I was more aiming for the shap.. read moreKnowing that this piece made you feel calm makes me happy. :)
I was more aiming for the shape of this poem than the words which I wrote, but I'm glad you like them both.
Thank you so much for your lovely review, Em. Always appreciated. x
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6 Years Ago
It's as near a sigh of words a poem could be, Yumna.
fantastic Yumna, You are a really amazing and very talented poetess, not only by taking any form and make it into a wonderful pleasurable read, but also with how You paint emotions, You do it perfectly.
beauty to the eyes, heart and mind, Thank You my dear!
Your lovely words here made me smile. Thank you so much for the appreciation, dear Light. I'm humble.. read moreYour lovely words here made me smile. Thank you so much for the appreciation, dear Light. I'm humbled 💜
Woww!😯.....this stunned me hair to toe!
Your efforts got wings Doctor....tis encouraging and inspiring to give this type o writing a try...
Spectacular! :)
Glad to get the little poetess stunned hahah
Thanks so much for reading and appreciating thi.. read moreGlad to get the little poetess stunned hahah
Thanks so much for reading and appreciating this one, Tahsin! :))