Ruining Ferraris (Limerick)

English Limerick.

There once was a puppy named Kahri,
who cruised in the desert safari.
His butt stuck like toffee
when he pottied coffee,

and ruined his master's Ferrari!

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I think it's adorable. Suggestion, thinking you are maybe not entirely happy with it due to the near rhyme with the name, which could easily be fixed unless the poem is actually dedicated to a human of that name or a puppy with that name. If that is the case my suggestion would be to somehow denote the pronunciation in the formatting of the name.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, I realized my dissatisfaction was partly due to that so I changed the name :p and ah, it's based on pure imagination - no one of my acquintance here owns a dog haha
Thank you for your suggestion, Lyn. Glad you found this adorable 😊

[Lyn Anderson]

Yay! So now I think the name should be a silly one to rhyme with safari and ferrari so like Kari or Sahri etc to exactly match.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:P you have me on the name part, thanks again :))

[Lyn Anderson]

I love it. yes, that sounds awesome.

[lightsong]

no Yumna, I'm actually very satisfied with it, I know You can edit it latter like most of us do with our poems, to make it better, but I very much liked the idea and surely Your amazing humorous sense, Your photos are always perfectly wonderful and also the Comic font You choose. it always used to give me a child spirit's feeling.

Very well done my dear, You are getting better and better, now I hope our Lorry from the Cafe will come to read this one and let us what he thinks :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:D hahah I don't suppose he will and I changed the name anyway soo :P
I'm glad you like the font, I got the idea from Richard 😊 he's a great teacher :)
Thank you so much for appreciating this one as well, my friend. 💜

[lightsong]

ohhhh Kari MUCH better ;)

[barleygirl]

The only think I might do to pump this up a bit is to say that the coffee was spilled rather than gulped. That way, the "ruining" is more dramatic & chaotic. Also the word "rode" could be pumped up by choosing a verb that's more playful & dynamic. But all in all, your imagination is off the charts in a good way! *smile* Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I thought about your suggestion as well but couldn't find a verb fitting enough and adhering to the syllable count but oh well. I did change the other one and feel mildly satisfied now with the outcome so thank you, BG! Glad you find the imagination here nice enough :D

[barleygirl]

I like the change you made *smile*