Last line kinda threw me in terms of being able to relate to it but I do like the story of it. A bit sad but what isn't? Haven wouldn't be a haven if we didn't crave an escape, no?
As for the rest of the poem, I love how you structured it with rising a thousand feet; wingless. Gives incredible imagery and gets the reader thinking on the Hows. The feelings. That sort of thing. But the tension, oh, that reminds me how my relationships often go. The distance created between each other when one rises or falls (a thousand feet or so) while the other remains the same.
Amazing write. I love your work, it gets me thinking.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
And your reviews leave me thinking too, I like that. I'm glad you like the structure. I'm still expe.. read moreAnd your reviews leave me thinking too, I like that. I'm glad you like the structure. I'm still experimenting in terms of that and can't settle with one.
I like what you said about the distance thing; that's often the case.
Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Lavi. :))
Hello, Andrew. Been a while since I read any of your stuff :x
Thank you for reading this pie.. read moreHello, Andrew. Been a while since I read any of your stuff :x
Thank you for reading this piece and your words. Very much appreciated. :)
This poem gives me the feeling of escaping, rising into the thermals to experience a safe haven. Your lines are truly poetic and the image you posted has a quality all of its own. Nice work.
Chris
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
That's how I intended this write to be. I like that pic too :)
I'm glad you feel it's poetic.. read moreThat's how I intended this write to be. I like that pic too :)
I'm glad you feel it's poetic. Thank you much for your lovely words, Christine. Appreciated.
Rising thousand feet with amazing effort still being wingless is an amazing act but this is not impossible to fly and find heaven. Finally you have found heaven. An amazing poem is very brilliantly penned. Rating...100
I like this.
Now,
having reached a thousand feet,
time to unfurl your wings,
and fly.
Couldn't resist.
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6 Years Ago
Wish it were that easy though :x
I'm glad you like it, Jon. Thank you so much for reading an.. read moreWish it were that easy though :x
I'm glad you like it, Jon. Thank you so much for reading and adding your words here. Appreciated :)
Last line kinda threw me in terms of being able to relate to it but I do like the story of it. A bit sad but what isn't? Haven wouldn't be a haven if we didn't crave an escape, no?
As for the rest of the poem, I love how you structured it with rising a thousand feet; wingless. Gives incredible imagery and gets the reader thinking on the Hows. The feelings. That sort of thing. But the tension, oh, that reminds me how my relationships often go. The distance created between each other when one rises or falls (a thousand feet or so) while the other remains the same.
Amazing write. I love your work, it gets me thinking.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
And your reviews leave me thinking too, I like that. I'm glad you like the structure. I'm still expe.. read moreAnd your reviews leave me thinking too, I like that. I'm glad you like the structure. I'm still experimenting in terms of that and can't settle with one.
I like what you said about the distance thing; that's often the case.
Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Lavi. :))
Gentle, powerful and worthwhile words dear friend. We must arise the chaos to know some kind of peace. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you so much for liking this one, John. Appreciate your words here. :)