I do not exist ...

Experimental. Written in fragments.

I left you alone,

last night.

I wander, lost.

I do not exist,

except in the

whites of your eyes,

sleeping quietly.

I do not exist,

except in the

midst of your dreams,

flitting out infrequently.

I do not exist,

except in the

softness of your breath,

my needs transparent.

I do not exist,

except in whispers

in the wind,

secretly spoken.

I do not exist elsewhere,

still, I wander, lost.

I left you alone,

last night...

Reviews

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I've read this three times and each im carried away in my longing thoughts and needing moments. I look back and realize that I have not left a review. I draw my attention back to how intensely somber each stroke of your words feel within me. I brush my hair back and focus my breathing again...wipe away that sneaky tear welling in the corner of my eye. All I can muster is the stillness...the knowing...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your review in itself is very poetic. Thank you so much for reading and your lovely words here, Queenie. Glad you felt this write. :)

[CD Campbell]

I like how the beginning and end was worded the same, like a snake biting its tail. Good use of commas. It made the reader slow down and enjoy the pauses. I liked it. CD

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've often used this style in my previous pieces too so thank you for appreciating that. I'm glad you like it :)

[andrew mitchell]

I saw a bond between mother and child, a love often not reciprocated but appreciated. Don’t know why but each read was the same.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting take on this piece. Reading back, I realize it can be taken that way though of course my mind is dense most times :x I like your words here, AM. Thank you so much for giving a new meaning to this write. :)

[00000000000000000000000..]

Your words exist upon that spoken wind never forgotten and never a doubt of plea:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here :)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Welcome:) your always worth the words

[Lyn Anderson]

It would seem a love unrequited, or at least, unappreciated. A love left to wander in the dark. Very nice piece

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Unappreciated is how I'd explain it too. Thank you so much for reading this one and appreciating.

[emmajoy]

You find phrases born from thoughts most can't understand or ever will, Ever beautiful, mysterious, meaningful yet beyond range for us mere mortals. You sense what might be the right way to think and be but - leave open a route to... whereverr the answer lies, hidden.. waiting - love or loveless, a remedy to cure all need. Perhaps?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I know, I'm guilty of writing what appears gibberish to most but I often don't realize it would be this way... I'd go for loveless from the start, given the option.
Thank you so much for your words here, Em. As always, appreciated. x

[emmajoy]

No, no, never gibberish but more deep as deep, needing thought and focus. We all need to share love.. tis learning to find what really matters.. takes time, the occasional :( but eventually so very beautiful.. Smiles on your special day. xx

[Crowley]

The desire to be noticed, caught up, the center of someone else storm, its a definite bipolar moment in time, euphoric one minute at the possibility, and manic when the intentions just aren't there. Really sad tone and reticent pacing. Great work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Crowley. :)

[Island Hippy]

Delicate but carries the heat and intensity of longing. Your phrases create that mood effortlessly! I must say some of your phrases are very unique. Beautiful read. Many mahalo.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That makes me smile. You actually understood the intention of this write quite nicely. Thank you so much for your words and for appreciating, Izzy. x

[lightsong]

still You are the BEST in this style, felt ethereal like a soft breath, felt mystical and mysterious yet clear as a real breath, very enjoyable read dear Yumna, bringing to Your page the emotions vibrant and sincere, we can't but to feel them.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You humble me, dear friend. I try to experiment and learn more every day. I'm glad it made you feel that way. Thank you so much for appreciating. x

[Onlyme]

Outer body experiences, while you sleep. Interesting and thought-provoking, Nice read.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Wasn't meant to be that way. It's more of an intense longing while still present in the surroundings but only just...still, interesting interpretation. Thank you for reading and your words here :)

[Onlyme]

Sorry, I never picked up on your interpration of what you where seeking to project. Blushes.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah, I like different interpretation than mine. :)

[Onlyme]

Glad to hear it. Always the best way. As you find out other perspectives and thoughts. :)