Debris of My Thoughts ...

Spontaneous write. Ramblings.

Debris of My Thoughts

Have you travelled beyond reach now, I wonder, 

as I lie in layers and layers of the debris of my thoughts.  

Has everything fallen, between us, 

everything which was veiled before;

the curtain finally lifted.

Now words have lost their touch 

as this world, a conniving beast, 

breathes down upon us...

Nothing remains the same 

and forevers are illusions we create. 

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

We live in a forward moving impulse of pulling back one curtain after another – in the hopes of enlightenment – and – this is how your poem has taken my line of thought! Love the format, wordplay and content of your wonderful write – a pleasure to read … :-)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Phill. Glad you like it :)

[barleygirl]

Your poem brings up several pertinent points about life & connections & attention spans. The one that stands out for me is how hard it is to be fully plugged in to other people's lives & how easy it is to drift off into neverland until the connection seems to be lost. Some people work hard to maintain these connections, but most people are willing to let them go, in my experience. I love how your pondering provokes lots of things to think about, with regard to living! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've learned too, in my experiences, that connections keep fading with time and holding on is just too pointless at times. I'm glad my words here made you think. Thank you so much for appreciating, BG. Hugs back :)

[Neville]

Nine times out of ten, I think yes, forever's are illusions we create.... but since our motivations change, so of course do the illusions we variously perceive.... I really enjoyed my visit here and your delightful 'Debris of My Thoughts' ............... Neville

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you enjoyed my debris here, Neville. Thank you so much for your thoughts and for appreciating.

[Neville]

..............pleasure :))

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Yumna, I apologize it has been a very long time since I last read your words. Beautifully laid - very thoughtful. There is a pondering and sincerity in your words that I love, at its core this offering it is quietly confronting - challenging ‘us’ to be brave, to examine ‘a’ truth. Your closing words are profound a resignation of sorts - my personal thoughts are that we must always be in a state of ‘understanding’ & ‘learning’ accepting what the other brings and in turn what they may need as well. Mahalo.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It's a pleasure to have you reading my pieces again, Izzy. I like your words here and do agree. Thank you so much for appreciating. xx

[Giulia King]

"Nothing remains the same
and forevers are illusions we create." That last line took my breath away. Wow, absolutely wow. Well done my dear friend

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your review here makes me smile. Thank you so much for your lovely words, Gullia. Glad you like it x

[Onlyme]

Deeply moving poem. About life, living and not living fully. But, hiding behind a fake show and pretending you are really living. When you are not. Interesting take on life in general. And how we all pretend at times. Everything in our lives is great. When actually it is not.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your thoughts here, Dee. I appreciate it (:

[Onlyme]

Your, very welcome.

[Richard John Davis]

Every new love is alive. And it never ends well.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here and for reading. Appreciated.

[Richard John Davis]

My pleasure, if your debris is this good I cant wait to see the rest.

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful opening couplet, the second line in particular really stood out for me, as does your final line, "and forevers are illusions we create". Your poem a delight to read. Thank you.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Christine. Glad you like it :)

[Chris Shaw]

I did indeed :)

[emmajoy]

' .. I lie in layers and layers of the debris of my thoughts. '

You always find a subtle way of saying so much.. seems you actually do and have isolated each thought of the US (the two of you) and tried to reason an outcome. Nothing or very little remains the same, perhaps one demands or needs too much. Who knows. We all have our strengths and frailties. Your writing rarely waivers from the logical - even if the topic comes neath the heading 'emotional'.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You always have a way of reading into what I write. That humbles me. Thank you so much for your words here, Em. xx

[emmajoy]

It's a privilege to read your words, Yumna, because what you express is done with great care and respect for and to your readers.. no throw-aways, just sincere thoughts. Mean that.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

As do you, dear friend. I learn so much from you every day, and not just in terms of writing. .. 💜

[emmajoy]

(You) Few people, family, friends in for quick b'day drink and nibbles as of now, so excuse quick return thank you.xx

[Najam Us Saher]

Last line is so thoughtfully phrased. I liked this a lot. It has so much to think upon.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating, Najam. Glad you like it (:

[Najam Us Saher]

You're most welcome :)