Enclosing an oyster of hopes ...

Spontaneous write. Ramblings of a tired mind. Finished abruptly/midthought ...

Enclosong an Oyster of Hopes ...

I have walked the distance

in unsteady strides,

enclosing an oyster of hopes,

and hues so blurred

it aches my limbs.

I cup my hands

as life sweeps me away

in a tango of emotions;

a whirlwind rumbling

underneath a paranoia of sorts.

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

"Enclosing an oyster of hopes"...great expression leading into the heart of the poem. I liked the "tango of emotions" as well. When I got to your last line, I misread the word "paranoia" for "piranha". It must be my muse saying its time for a cup of coffee! ; )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your appreciation of this piece, Kelly. I hope you enjoyed the coffee ;) :)

[barleygirl]

This pretty much sums up how life can leave us feeling like we've just jumped into a roiling surf & the waves are batting us about into unexpected positions. I love how you convey the sensations of being tossed around by life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The past year really taught me not to expect too much from life, 'cause we get tossed around anyway imo. Best if one learns how to cope while keeping a straight head...
Thanks so much for appreciating and your words, BG.

[CD Campbell]

Hmm. I think creating in that "tired mind", occasionally allows one to be possessed by that true lyrical demon/angel thats buried in our subconscious. You could have rambled on for twenty more stanzas and kept my attention. Good work. CD

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Unfortunately, my tired mind is only capable of jotting down a few scribbles at a time..I can't imagine myself writing something near to 20 stanzas in even my 'sane' mind though...! :P
Thank you so much for your appreciation, CD. I'm humbled.

[emmajoy]

What it is to be so bemused that writing poetry seems to come so effortlessly, Yumna!!! For me the two stanzas are mirrorerd refkections , each having that little less or more than before. Unsteady strides.. life sweepts me away.. have to think on that.. so, will return. Perhaps?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sometimes, it does seem like writing is effortless. Thank you so much for reading and thinking over my words, Em. Appreciated :)

[emmajoy]

I love reading your words, they have so many colours around and within them. The final couplet is a chapter in itself!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this
This is brilliant

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the words "enclosing an oyster of hopes". I heard them words elsewhere. I liked the gentleness of your thoughts. Made the reader think with you. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for reading and appreciating, Coyote. Glad you like it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my dear friend.

[Gee]

Have read this numerous times and I’m still baffled, but, I am thick :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

well, ah, I'm sorry it got you baffled..still, thank you so much for taking the time to read. Appreciated :)