Oozing II

Experimental.

the night beckons me ~ closer. 

The leaves of tomorrow rustle softly, 

yet menacing. 

Barefooted, I walk, 

the scars on my arms, 

my thighs tingle 

...the evening breeze touches them, 

almost kissing. 

And those on my heart, 

kept hidden, oozing... 

the night beckons me ~ closer. 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Seems to me, your words are a mix of both warmth and fear. Words suchas 'almost kissing' and 'manacing' don'#t make good bed-fellows at all. Whilst as always, your touch is gentle and brief, there's a heaviness somewhere.. perhaps. Perhaps. Hugs, dear friend.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting observation and interpretation. I like that :) I think heaviness describes the feeling I wrote it with the best.
Thank you so much for your review, Em. Hugs back

[barleygirl]

As a person who prefers a bit of danger with my passion, I love the way your poem blends the two ideas in a lightly suggestive way. I love how your descriptions are vivid with some double-meanings that keep a reader wondering (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad it made you wonder. Thank you so much for appreciating, BG. Hugs back :)

[R.E. Ray]

Your imagery is spectacular in this poem. Still, it's not a place or time I'd wish to be. Walking in the darkness, scarred and vulnerable, is a terrifying feeling, perhaps enough to run, if not for the engulfing blackness and bare feet. Maybe I'm reading more deeply than I should on this piece. Nonetheless, it's another excellent write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've always felt a strong if somewhat melancholic connection with the night but no, you read it the right amount of deep, Robert ;) Thank you so much for appreciating this piece and for sharing your thoughts here :)

[lightsong]

You are an expert in this style, each time You gift something new with few words, speaking to the emtions and touching the senses with a soft brush, yet urge it to go deep... wonderful piece again Yumna, emotive and real!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That humbles me very much. I'm glad you think this way about my writes. And yes, I'm rather fond of this style, somehow feels closer to me when I want to let out a lot in a few words...
Thank you so much for your gracious review, Light. Truly appreciated

[lightsong]

You are welcome my friend, and yes I believe You feel closer to this style, it's reflected by how perfectly You write it :)

[MsJewel]

I love the slightly melancholy feel to your words. Wonderful images as well. Beautiful writing my friend. :) Julie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for feeling this write, Julie. Appreciate your lovely words :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

This feels like a gentle release, even if only temporary. I'm a creature of the night, so I relate to this on a personal level. There is a bit of freedom that the night seems to bring. Wonderful write!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, it was indeed written as a release of sorts so I'm glad you take it that way. And I agree, the night has much to offer to me (as a muse too, for that matter)
Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, Travis :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It was a pleasure.