If I Die Tonight

Spontaneous write.

If I Die Tonight

And if I die tonight,

I will remember 

the places you touched, 

the folds on your skin.

and I will rise 

in the tumult of day 

when you whisper my name.

With a glazed smile 

lingering upon my lips, 

my thoughts will float

if I die ~ tonight.

Reviews

[LazerRays]

If you died tonight; I'd be so sad so don't you ever die, yumna hahaha. You know what I like to call this type of poetry? Mom poetry ;) nevermind me ignore that hahahaha! Idk, I'm probably over thinking this but this is making me kinda sad. Either it's the thought of you dying or the jealousy of who you originally wrote this for. Hmmmmmmmmm jk!!!! :P nice one. Thumbs up. Applause. Yeet.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:P well, you do know me and that I don't write like this anymore ;) but oh, I'll have to remember who I wrote this for hahah
Thank you so much for your words here and for reading this sappy one even though you don't like this genre ;) don't overthink too much, I'm all yours lool :P

[LazerRays]

Hahahaha ;) I know :P

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Wow, such depth! I loved it:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. Appreciate your words here :))

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Again you are very welcome but think people should be thanking the writer for giving the time and value so yeah thank you:)

[Ghania]

Oh my!! This is so good! One of the best things I've read today. =)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's sweet of you to say :) thank you so much for appreciating, Ghania (:

[Ghania]

You're always welcome. 💕

[MsJewel]

I love the sot, tender flow of your lovely words. Absolutely stunning :) Julie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Julie. Glad you like it (:

[An owl on the moon]

You awaken such a deep, wild moment, reflecting on the now, and all that has been in this wondrous breath. It is both soft and tender in the love lingering, as well as fierce and strong in the remembering, lifetime to lifetime clinging to Love's light. So beautiful. Tears before dawn, and that's okay.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your beautiful words, Craig. Always appreciated :)

[An owl on the moon]

So hoping your light will return here soon. The world has so much night, but the divine stars keep us hoping.

[Kathryn Smith]

Oh this took my breath away. (Ironic right?) haha
Very good my friend! I have to read more of your craft!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Such a sweet comment! Thank you so much for appreciating, Kat :*

[Mr.Writer]

I gotta admit, I almost teared up on this one... Your choice of words and the way you wrote this poem expressed the words and emotions intended in the poem and made the readers feel what you wanted them to. Amazing job Yumna! :))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, I'm glad you felt that way, Shaan. I'll be honest, I don't really write for the readers or with the intention to make them understand what I wrote, but it's certainly nice knowing they do :)
Thank you so much for appreciating :)

[Mr.Writer]

No prob Yumna :))

[Carol Cashes]

This brought to mind a new artist that I've discovered: Rag N Bone Man. He has a song with the lyrics: "When my skin grows old, and my breath goes cold--I'll be thinkin' 'bout you." I like yours much better - and there is no mistaking your "sweet" and "tender" take on things....
I would bet my Netflix account that you have a phenomenal bedside manner.....

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's such a lovely comment, thank you so much for appreciating, Carol! I'm glad you like it :) and it's certainly nice seeing you back around here :D

PS I don't get your 'phenomenal bedside manner' reference, but I'm single ;P ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if we have been touched by another human...we can die happy...it isn't about what we own, what we amass...things don't touch us like that...people do.

i love the brevity of this...you open doors for the reader to walk through on his or her own.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree, people do touch our hearts in ways which is impossible to forget...
Thank you so much for appreciating and your lovely words here, Jacob :)

[emmajoy]

Perhaps this is how life as well as love should be: using words wisely because - they might be the last you speak to someone.. even in losing touch for some inexplicable reason. Once said, words are hard to erase from mind, from memory. Your language truly gives and gives in this poem, dear you. You wrap your emotion around another being and he or she grows sky-high.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your review is so beautiful and makes me content since this really is a piece with genuine feelings, perhaps even more so than some of my previous writes... Thank you so much for appreciating, Emma. x

[emmajoy]

Hugs your words, blessings to the hand that 'holds the pen'!