Millennia

Experimental. Evening scribbles. Not sure about the structure ...

December saps me

in dizzy wakefulness.

Little by little, I shed,

over what seems like

a myriad of millennia,

yet the depths remain

unreachable ...

broken laments echo

throughout, the quiet sea

reflecting alongside,

the waves still;

I share my fears as

December saps me

in dizzy wakefulness.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Again the poem honest and true. You made the reader feel and understand your words and thoughts.
"broken laments
echo throughout, the quiet sea
reflecting alongside, the waves
still; I share my fears as"
You write with a ancient pen. You write with the knowledge of life sweetness and life pain. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do always try my best to write what I feel lately... thank you so much for reading and appreciating, Coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are doing well and you are welcome dear friend.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words move like dreamish music, carrying us all into that December place, that sighing world. So much on the surface, and the depths still beyond your grasp, moved over those waves. The sea holds my soul, so these words move me deeply. Thank you for this rich reflection of you.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Craig. Always appreciated.

[emmajoy]

You have a natural affinity to structure when it comes to presenting words. it would be truly interesting to hear you read this poem. It has a heart, a specific core connection to your thoughts about time. Might you consider using eg. vocaroo to record it? Meantime, your writing soars higher and higher!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's such a wonderful and humbling comment over my writing! Thank you so much for appreciating and reading, Em. I will consider recording my voice over this piece for you then :))

[emmajoy]

Oh myy, that would be wonderful.. but, only if and when you want to, The words and their meanings need inspire you to read them as pure magic! Says I, still learning how... and how! x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the structure...i am finding December to be a deep freeze of both emotions and words...
and i am awake, but feel half asleep most of the time...
creatively....
nicely done...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do actually relate to that, words froze for me too for a while.. hopefully it gets better in the new year...
Thank you so much for appreciating this piece, Jacob. :)

[R.E. Ray]

As you know, I'm not a scholarly poet. So, I won't comment on the structure, except that it works fine (whatever happens when the words hit the screen/paper works for me).

I like this poem. I'm confident it speaks to many people. In fact, as I read your words, I realized you had captured what I've felt. You write so well, and every read gives me more inspiration. Nice piece.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And neither am I, my friend. Guess we all are here to learn and grow as writers together :)
I'm glad this piece resonated with you. Thank you so much for your lovely words here. Very much appreciated. :)