Painting a canvas of broken promises ...

Experimental. Probably too fragmented but that's how my thoughts have been lately...

Painting A Canvas of Broken Promises

For once, I undressed 
my emotions and laid them bare.
I set you free; the confines 
of my mind, a cage.

I watched you soar
high above, while I dipped
my fingers, painting a canvas
of broken promises.

I left my mind, straying away
from the void buried deep;
you are drug to my craving heart, 
it whispers ~ a quiet amen.

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Moving, deeply emotional poem. The confrontation with oneself at the stripped bare level is daunting. Lovely language, form, flow, metaphor, imagery. “fingers painting a canvas of broken promises”- resonates...wishing you well in letting them go my friend...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Annette :)

[Kerdiwen Glass]

Whoa I love this. It's beautiful.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words dear friend.
"my fingers, painting a canvas
of broken promises."
Us writers paint with our paper and pen. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree! Thank you so much for liking :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this chapter and you are welcome my friend.

[BBP]

This was a very rare and soul bearing piece. It was beautifully written and I loved the title!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Bev! And I love your new profile photo :D you look cool! ((:

[BBP]

aww thanks....btw.. I am cool! ;) hahaha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p hahahah yeah I guess 😜😉

[Levi Levin]

Very thoughtfully written. Great piece!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, SS :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i like this a lot...its honest, vulnerable and true to life ...universal layered and the language is elegant yet common .. its the way you put it together that gives it such swaying movement .. and i instantly like the right hand orientation and your opening "...undressed...." quickened my heart and got my attention..a fine use of personification ..well done..so moved in the reading
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your thoughts on this piece, Einstein. Glad you felt this way. Much appreciated 😊