Closure

Experimental. Writing on a cold Friday night.

Closure

I saw you wash 

your mouth clean of obscenities; 

at first denied, 

but your palms are sweaty 

as you hurried to wipe them away 

and masked your breaths.

I watched from a distance, 

my head resting 

against the windowpane; 

in between the chaos of the day, 

I closed my heart 

to love.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

This literal kind of closure - building the walls around the heart for protection isn't what we normally take closure to mean nowadays. It's quite sad (but necessary) that we have to do this.
A strong feeling of regretful hesitancy embedded in this one Yumna.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, 'tis sometimes inevitable to do...
Thank you for your words here, Tony. As always, appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A dead heart is a quiet heart. Honest and strong statements led to sad ending. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your generous review, my friend. Appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Always my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Relic]

There's a switch that goes off internally when we discover devious acts against us or denials in the face of truth. They're are sad moments that stick with us and create self-doubt. Time will tell and lessons must be learned.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

They do. Great words, thank you for your insight here, Relic. Very much appreciated :)

[emmajoy]

Words so often - too often, have a way of unwrapping emotions; sometimes, just sometimes, they crumble in the wind and.. fly away.. .

I truly hope that by thinking, creating, displaying such powerful thoughts, you've sent them to the place where they'll fade - forever..

smiles to bandage your thoughts, dear friend..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do hope so too. Thank you for your kind words, Em, and for the smiles. As always, appreciated x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

denial is the knee jerk reaction....but we can't take back the lies later...we will never be believed again...this reminds me of all the allegations coming forward about politicians, movie people and sports stars...the denial is more often than not...the untruth.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting thoughts. Thank you for your words here, Jacob. Appreciated :)

[Levi Levin]

A clear message to those whose eyes read between the lines. Great job!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, LL. :)

[Asante]

This writing omits lots of distance, Yumna. Right from the onset, you give off that vibe with your first stanza, and every one that follows further builds upon such a vibe.

The last line is the necessary gut-punch. This is strong, sobering writing. x

[Dr. YumnaKay]

As it was intended to be.. thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating, Sante. Glad it came off as that to you. x

[Einstein Noodle]

poignant .... inspires lots of questions i want to answer ...but i don't want to insert my own story ;) i think this could be expanded on easily but not necessary of course ... its is surgical .. precise and vivid ... his sweaty palms belie the washing of his mouth..love it!! so glad your poem ends with closure ..too many times the window is opened a crack and another weak invitation escapes ..good job Dr. ..great read for me
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The last part was what I started off with at first, but decided it would come off better at the end. Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Einstein. Loved your review of this piece :))