Disguised

Experimental. Fantasizing about death (?) not to be taken as suicidal lol Just playing with some images in my (weird) mind. Also experimenting with giving (dreamy) poetry another shot...

death of a love 

dreamt atop 

                          candy clouds 

and waffled oceans

death of a heart

now hardened 

                          with time

and glaciers which melt

death ever so near

in pale pink and 

frilled attires 

                        ~ disguised

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

There is a tenderness even in the painful lingering of death's watch. The sweetness mingles with the sour sighs of a heart in transition. It seems when I have contemplated death that my life has taken on a deeper meaning. Perhaps, dear poet, this is true with you?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Just came by this review of yours :x
I feel as much as we should be aware of the reality of death looming over us, we avoid talking or even acknowledging it which is what increases the fear factor when it comes near. In some ways, I feel it could be a huge relief from the burden of life.
Thank you so much for your words here, Craig. Appreciated.

[An owl on the moon]

I truly appreciate your thoughts (poetry and prose)... and have heard that those who speak of death, who contemplate its coming, who are aware each day that it is inevitable... they are the ones who carry more joy and more thankfulness for the time they are living. May we somehow learn the value of life by knowing that it will come to an end. And yes, I understand your view.. death bringing relief from the heavy weight of the world.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your new poetry. Powerful and worthwhile. You made your point and feeling come alive for the reader. Most of us are wearing disguised. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the outstanding poetry. No wasted words in the poem.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, true regarding us wearing disguises... thank you so much for your kind words, Coyote. Appreciated (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Always my pleasure and you are welcome.

[emmajoy]

For some reason i expected you to write more.. but to do so by drifting off and away, gazing back at.. whatever. Think you've left this open to further thought by self rather than for readers. Perhaps.

Meantime, what's before me, i find intriguing because it sets a grey emotion in a bright frame. Indeed, your disguise has worked.. ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're right actually, often enough after falling short of words, I post it as it is and then come back reflecting and adding/changing on to what I wrote...
Death is intriguing enough, I think... thank you so much for your words here, Em. Appreciated, as always (:

[emmajoy]

I hope you didn't take my comment(s) as negative. Maybe I sensed a holding back on self or public display..or both.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah, that never happens :)
holding back might be what it is, probably...

[emmajoy]

My favourite word: Probably!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah I thought it was: perhaps ;) ;P

[emmajoy]

'Perhaps' is my second favourite!!! Must shhh now, your writing is too important to step into humour, dear friend!

[Jason Sans]

A very successful experimental write in my honest opinion.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating. Glad you think so 😊

[Carol Cashes]

"death of a heart
now hardened
with time"

Or in my case, exchanged for a thumpin' gizzard! I, too, liked the format, gives the reader time to digest/process/absorb both images and emotions.
Another gem in your literary crown.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha a thumpin' gizzard won't be a bad idea either ;) :P
Thank you for appreciating this one, Carol. Glad to see you back around here :)

[Einstein Noodle]

oooooooooooooooo i like it .. i like the imagery and language and the free verse is suited well to your poem .. glad i came to read ... very creative and inspiring to me!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

The structure is actually inspired by another writer friend but I'm glad you found it inspiring. Most humbling. Thank you so much for appreciating, EN (:

[Tony Jordan]

I like this.
I like to observe digital TVs as they try to handle the massive amounts of information in a scene which includes the ocean because the ocean has so much going on at once - the TV's decoder tries to fill in and recreate it but it's digital limitations and artifacts do indeed represent it as 'waffly'.
Only now on 4K vision does it seem natural.

As Coolio once said "Death aint nothing but a heartbeat away ..." no wonder it is such a common topic of thought. Dreams of death are usually a sign of moving on - leaving an old life behind.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This review seemed a lot like 'waffle' to me so much that I had to read it twice to see your point ;P An interesting point of view though. A sign of moving on, you say? It's a good thing then ;)
Thank you so much for your thoughts here, TJ. Always appreciated (:

[Tony Jordan]

Hah - waffle indeed lmao...you saw through my 'Disguise' then Yumna
Your welcome - always welcome my dear friend
:))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

One of your many 'disguises', Tony ;) :p lol

[Tony Jordan]

You would see through them all.
A bright bulb burneth within thon beautiful cranium.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Beautiful cranium 😂😂 this is hilarious lmao
Maybe 😛😎

[Tony Jordan]

You can send the money for those compliments to my paypal account...hahaha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

If I started doing that you'd be rich soon haha :p

[Tony Jordan]

I have friends like you Yumna. I'm rich beyond my wildest dreams...
;PP

[Dr. YumnaKay]

*grabs a tissue and sniffs


Lol jk, of course, TJ. Beyond any riches. Ditto, dear friend. Hugs

[Tony Jordan]

aww..(hugs)
right...Okay...but you still gotta send the money
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p hahaha sure ;)

[The Eggman]

I really enjoyed reading this piece, especially the broken narrative that gave pause to the thoughts as they were coming into the reader's mind. Well done. I would have liked to see you go farther with it as I was kind of disappointed when it came to an end, but nice nevertheless.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, well I always end up short of coming up with words to continue with my pieces. Most of my pieces are short that's why... I appreciate your honest review. Thank you (:

[Mirror]

"death ever so near
in pale pink and

frilled attires
~ disguised"

How often it is, dear friend. death of love, friendship, relationship, and persons, is painful.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is, painful indeed. Thank you for your words here. I appreciate.