Checkmate

Ramblings of a raging mind...

I walk breathless, 

keeping within the circle of life, 

my laments go unheard 

as ​I suffocate, run loose and 

eventually break free...

love binds in ways 

I couldn't fathom before, 

tormenting; and I'm caught off guard 

as life calls - checkmate!

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

oh! what a strong closing says i! i was kind of shocked and surprised by it ... danger danger danger ... lots to chew on in your poem Doc! layered and universal in application in my opinion .. "Checkmate" ... game over! what to do?? powerful ma'am!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one, Einstein. Glad you think so :))

[Tony Jordan]

Yeah, life can seem to taunt unmercifully sometimes as if testing. You intrigue 'Life' and so it selects you for some of it's prime sadistic treatment - 'let's see how hard you reallllly are then...?'
I think to be fair it then rewards if you triumph without going over to the dark-side (sheesh it's always Star Wars with me ...lol)

Great imagery - finely penned Yumna as always-ish
;pp

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sometimes I really doubt that selection criteria of life...
Thank you for your insight and such a nice review as always-ish(?), Tony 😉😊

[Tony Jordan]

Well I think there's a bit of random-ness in Life's selection process (luck?)
Welcome Yumna. I do do nice reviews don't I ?
Hahah

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, so you do ;) ;P

[Tony Jordan]

OMG ! You speak Belfast !! lol
too cool !! *insert another coolest emoji here*

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do? uhm does 'Aye' come under that? lol :P

[Tony Jordan]

'Aye' and 'so you do' both are common phrases - and saying 'so I do' or 'so I did' lots of times...e.g. I love music, so I do...I wrote a poem, so I did.
lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's interesting lol must have picked that from some novel set in belfast 😜😎😛

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - perhaps it was Titanic...lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That would be too much, titanic as a novel grrrr

[Tony Jordan]

Have to read it in the bath...haha

[An owl on the moon]

One can feel your ramblings, wanderings over Life's board, your feet growing weary in the chase. It can be like this too often, play by play, move by move, ultimately yielding to the game. Your poetry, your phrases, your dark song is so powerfully confessed, dear Yumna. I can only hope you get to kick Life's butt next time. Believe me, there's always a next time.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your words here and for the nice wishes, Craig. Truly appreciated 😊

[An owl on the moon]

Very happy to send boxes of joy across the sea, Yumna. 😊

[emmajoy]

Ramblings perhaps but, an emotionl poem.. whether true or othersise. Has an air of desperation perhaps.. 'Chekmate' has a finality to it.. both sides of the coin.
Life has a way of turning dreams upside down.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

My ramblings are always about what I feel/think at the moment of writing so yes, I think you summarized that perfectly. And true too, life has a weird way of doing that... Thank you for your words here, Em. I appreciate it.

[emmajoy]

Living in the now is a pretty good rule, Yumna - as long as one can cope!