~ Invisible ~

Inspired. Written as a description of my current state of mind. Maybe a description of myself...

She was ~ invisible ... among thousands of souls

 

there strolled one more. A non entity; nothing special, except for in her own head.

 

Time and again she wandered, deeper still into her own mind; probing, encountering submerged thoughts; 

her eyes sparkled --- and her lips curled into a sideways smile. 

Among thousands of souls, she was ~ invisible ...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Oh to be invisible, to see what others hide.. bad, bad me.. but honest!

Your words wear an almost tortured shawl.. as if disappearing into a self-inflicted cloud of hopelessness.. not sure the sparkling eyes were happy .. perhaps sparkling with tears.. ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You read deeper into my words than I have conveyed but so accurate...thank you for your thoughts here, Emma. I appreciate it 😊

[emmajoy]

Your writing deserves careful reading. Emotions aren't merely- how to put it - linguistic ingredients. x

[Najam Us Saher]

This is really nicely penned. We do feel like we are invisible sometimes and this poem expresses that state really well.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating this piece, Najam. (:

[Tony Jordan]

I think you'll find Najam was appreciating TJ more than 'Invisible' by YumnaKay
just saying...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ikr, I don't mind haha I love your reviews more than what I write anyways, TJ 😉💜

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome Yumna.
I appreciate both the things Tony. 😄

[Mr.Writer]

Woah...I got chills as I read this!
I felt the emotions of sadness and despair hit me hard!
Well done, keep it up Yumna

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan (:

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Tony Jordan]

Wow - what a waste...
If I was invisible I would be straight down the local gym for the ladies salsa - before and afta !! lol
Great use of format to help convey the ethereal mood.
A woman went to the doctors and said to the doctor - I feel like I'm invisible - the doctor said, "Next !"

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p haha you always know how to make me laugh, Tony!
Maybe it works differently with the male species feeling invisible lol
I wonder who the doc was hahah 😎
Thank you, TJ. Love your words here 😊

[Tony Jordan]

dunno...Dr ..erm...Karim I think.
Welcome Yumna

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao must be one rudely egoistic doc 😂😂😜

[Najam Us Saher]

Nice one Tony...😂

[Tony Jordan]

You know Dr Karim ...?
I just made that name up ;p

[Tony Jordan]

Hi Najam - thank you lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, I do ;) have been looking at the mirror ever since you mentioned haha 😜😂

[Najam Us Saher]

I laughed reading that. Thanks for the smile after it. 😀