~ Invisible ~

Inspired. Written as a description of my current state of mind. Maybe a description of myself...

She was ~ invisible ... among thousands of souls

 

there strolled one more. A non entity; nothing special, except for in her own head.

 

Time and again she wandered, deeper still into her own mind; probing, encountering submerged thoughts; 

her eyes sparkled --- and her lips curled into a sideways smile. 

Among thousands of souls, she was ~ invisible ...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Oh to be invisible, to see what others hide.. bad, bad me.. but honest!

Your words wear an almost tortured shawl.. as if disappearing into a self-inflicted cloud of hopelessness.. not sure the sparkling eyes were happy .. perhaps sparkling with tears.. ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You read deeper into my words than I have conveyed but so accurate...thank you for your thoughts here, Emma. I appreciate it 😊

[emmajoy]

Your writing deserves careful reading. Emotions aren't merely- how to put it - linguistic ingredients. x

[Cecelia A. Green]

Awesome work!
This speaks to me! Great Job.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Cecelia (:

[Hbrook]

I find this very, very alluring. It really sucks me in. Good job. This is a grea

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I'm glad you like it (:

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Like Disappearing into a cloud...like being yourself without fear...like smiling in a crowd, knowing they cannot see you. Now that is real power! Eloquent, contemplative, great "disappearing effect at the end. Well-penned!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your lovely words here, Annette! I appreciate it (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and among those thousands, she finally realized
her self=worth...and that she doesn't need to compare herself to anyone.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, so true. Thank you for adding in your words here, Jacob. I appreciate it 😊

[Jon Roggie]

I like being invisible. So much more fun when you finally get noticed.

Nice one.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a nice perspective. Thank you, Jon 😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this
It's pure white and
Irradescent

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Julie (:

[Sinbulvinter]

This is beautifully rewritten. I love the way it's formatted, it really fits the piece. Feeling invisible is a emotion I think a lot of people can relate to.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating and for your lovely words, Nerissa. Glad you like the formatting too 😊

[Sinbulvinter]

You're welcome. =)

[William Liston]

I love the dark, cathartic themes that have been resonating through your poems lately. This one felt as soft as a cool breeze and as haunting as a stormy night. I love the typography choices (especially that of the last word) and how they relfect the poem's beautifully melancholic essence. Your choices in punctuation reflect the speaker's scattered mindset, but nevertheless, there's still a gentle continuity embedded in each word. I very much enjoyed!

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here and for appreciating, William. And I'm glad you noticed the change in font colour of the last word and it's relation to the piece.
Glad you enjoyed 😊

[Stella Armour]

thousands of souls do not matter if you are happy ... your inner self will sparkle

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here. I appreciate it 😊

[Stella Armour]

it was my pleasure..