Crevices

Experimental. Dawn scribbles.

through the soft crevices

of the night,

I sense the air thick

with your morning breath

enclosed within

layer upon layers

of confessions

brought to life;

 

through the soft crevices

of the night,

I read the verses unread

as you exhale

under your slightly

quivering lips

up till now

enshrouded within;

through the soft crevices

of the night.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

There is a real hypnagogic feel to this - could be real or dreamed... Class!

I'm glad I did that found poetry piece out of your titles wayyy back when you were just a pup. There's no way I would even attempt it with the list on the right e.g. "Search Me...Oozing...Crevices...One More Time...Till It's Time to Sleep" - could get me jailed!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p I should take this as a compliment but 'pup'?! Tis an insult to my title-ary skills! Lol jk 😛😂 btw, I think you managed that again ;)
Thank you for appreciating, Tony!
P.S I didn't really know 'hypnagogic' so thanks for that too :) feels nice!

[Tony Jordan]

lmao @ 'pup'
Welcome Yumna

hypnagogic is nice when it hits and the bed is close by so we can just go to sleep but not so nice when it hits and we're still on a bus or plane or walking home - then it's pure torture !!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, I meant it feels like a nice word to describe this piece ;) but I agree with what you say, lol have experienced that too while travelling ;p

[Tony Jordan]

Yes it is hypnagogically somnambulant dear friend
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Errr lol sounds too scientific now 😎😛

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - well poetry is an art and a science ;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol you just made that amendment! 😎😛

[Sinbulvinter]

I agree with Sapientiam that your poetry does seem to have this mysterious and somewhat cryptic feel to it. It always makes me think about the meaning and message being conveyed. Very well done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah well, I used to be pretty much simple before I became all cryptic :p lol thank you so much for your words here and for appreciating, Nerissa! Glad you like it. 😊💜

[Sinbulvinter]

You're very welcome. I always like your poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds me of the first nights with someone....that pillow talk, happens after the physical closeness....the conversation brings the emotional closeness...the confessions , each really getting to know and understand the other.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a lovely interpretation. Thank you for your words here, Jacob. I appreciate it 😊

[Sapientiam]

I need to review your stuff more often because I've been reading your poetry and they are so professional. I love this one especially; romantic in a sense, yet, a bit mysterious to me. Your word choices bring out this nightly essence that contributes to the mysteriousness of it. This was very enjoyable to read... Well done!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a great comment. I'm glad you find my pieces worth reading. Thank you so much for your lovely words and for appreciating, Sapientiam! Means a lot 😊

[Tracey~]

I love your morning musings. I love so many lines in this I can't pick out one favorite. You did a beautiful job capturing that moment and allow the reader to feel it.. get lost in it.. well done..xo

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your lovely words here and for appreciating! 😊