Enraptured

Experimental. Another attempt at creating images. Not really satisfied...

An ethereal morning ... frenzies of delight;

followed by a trickle of heavy breaths. 

A vast horizon ... momentary silence;

followed by a rushing wave of emotions.

A waning, gibbous moon ... night whispers;

followed by clouds of silver linings. 

~ exhilarated, enthralled, enraptured ~

Reviews

[Mr.Writer]

An emotional, cool and wavy adventure that leads on to the night and explains how the person feels in 3 words.... such a creative piece tbh Yumna!
I'm satisfied with all your poems cuz I can see the effort you put into them!
Well done, keep it up! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you appreciate 😊

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words dear friend.
~" exhilarated, enthralled, enraptured ~"
Three powerful words above. I liked them. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think so too regarding those words. Thank you for appreciating (:

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome my friend.

[CATVLYST]

enjoyed your work, if you have time please check out my writing and leave a review

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed (:
I'll be sure to :)

[mournful bear]

very nice!!!!!! i didn't know you can make a movie into poems!! all the exhilarating emotion coming at you like in a movie scene FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a very flattering comment. Thank you for appreciating. Glad you like it (:

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wow! Beautiful word play and creatively done.these three words are themselves powerful enough to influence! You said it all!
Personification. Rain pours heavily, stops and then wave flows.
Relatable.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Tazeen. Glad you can relate. I appreciate your words here 😊

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The melding of one day's experience encapsulated through three words - breath-taking write! :-)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Phill. Glad you like it (:

[barleygirl]

I like what you're doing here. Your barely-there descriptions definitely bring on the ideas of sensual exploration without taking a specific path, leaving the specifics to the reader. I'm just not sure about the last line . . . I love these words, but they are more "cerebral" than the rest of your poem, which is more sensory. I thought about -- what if you put one of the multi-syllabic "e" words in between each stanza, just one stand-alone word in each spot? Just an idea.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your idea was initially my idea too when I first wrote it, I did write those words in between but I couldn't get satisfied with the form/structure in the end. But I totally agree with your words. This piece seems clunky to me and I'll be getting back to this. Thank you for your suggestion and insight, BG. I appreciate it always (:

[Tony Jordan]

I'm with Jacob. This is a soft - like a big comfy pillow, and it still retains the passion of the 'before'.
Yes imagery is generated in each case then overall the feeling of love and contentment swathes the reader. Top notch!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a great comment! Thank you for appreciating, Tony! (and the suggestion too) ;) glad you like it (:

[Tony Jordan]

welcome Yumna.

[Carol Cashes]

A beautiful poem
followed by the the appropriate response:

Compact and complete. You accomplished your mission of creating images. They come spontaneously to the mind - a hallmark of good work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Carol, thank you so much. Your appreciation means a lot to me. Glad you like it 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's almost like the morning after---and how everything looks different....more beautiful---the ecstasy carries over. This creates a soft, contented mood.

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Jacob 😊