No Escape

That feeling of being trapped in your own mind is what this speaks of (I think). Experimental.

Sometimes, it felt like a set up. The world she lived in and the world she stepped into. A distinct line separating the two. 

The world she lived in, which was once a refuge, now became a deluge -- of wrapped up emotions, unspoken pains and horrendous acts of which she left no trails ... buried.

The world she stepped into, which was once what she strayed away from, became a relief; an escape from the world she lived in -- of faked smiles, energy spikes and a made up persona of which she was the unequivocal mistress ... without distress. 

Until - the two worlds merged and she could no longer distinguish between them. Collided, they came off more powerful as one; bringing forth the destruction she knew that laid around the corner, waiting to grab her from the edges of which she had ... no escape. 

Author's Note

Captcha - agitable ... interesting lol

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Good job combining interesting word choices to describe a mind-boggling scenario that many of us experience from time to time. I'm bipolar, so I definitely understand how the mind can become a trap, grinding on stuff & perceiving life thru the lens of "mania" or "depression" . . . and then your piece takes this a step further, when everything is combined into a big mess. The best part is the way you use dynamic verbs in your descriptions (energy spikes, moods collided, grabbing her from the edges) -- conveys the sensations of an attack from within.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your thoughts here, BG. I like the way you perceive my pieces. Truly appreciated (:

[Norman 223]

I have often wondered why dreams can be so bizarre, but whilst in that dream mode everything seems logical. I think your poem has described and even explored this situation, but like the dream sequence, even logic becomes illogical.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is an interesting interpretation. Now reading my piece again, it does seem like it though that wasn't what I had in mind...
Thank you for your insightful words here. I appreciate it 😊

[Sinbulvinter]

Wow... This is really thought provoking. Gives a real sense of loneliness and confusion, that "I don't belong" feeling is portrayed really well. A deep look at life, and I think a lot of people can relate to this kind of feeling.
Your style of writing is really good, I think is the first non-poem piece I've read by you. I really like this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I do have written prose although I would so like to excel in it more than I (supposedly) excel in poetry ;P
Thank you for thoughts here, Nerissa. Glad you like it (:

[Sinbulvinter]

I think you did very well in this. I really liked it. I love your poetry too!

[miahstr]

Interesting idea she can't fit in either world alone anymore and she sees things tearing up at the edges.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here (:

[Giulia King]

Amazing write, as always Yumna. This was a pretty awesome poem to read in the morning :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Gullia!! Thank you for appreciating this write (: Glad you like it 😊
Hope your day goes on nicely, dear friend 💜

[emmajoy]

Life is a fancy dress for many people, so much so their thoughts congeal into a knot of disbelief and self.wonder or more so, when writing, a bewilderment of creativity and fact. That is how i interpret your words, in places muddled, in places precisely stated. Interesting concept here, sweet pea.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Emma. I like how you interpret this piece. I appreciate your words here 😊

[emmajoy]

I do try, honestly! :)

[Tania]

"Until - the two worlds merged and she could no longer distinguish between them. Collided, they came off more powerful as one; bringing forth the destruction she knew that laid around the corner, waiting to grab her from the edges of which she had ... no escape. "

I love how relatable this poem is as we do not simply d live in only one world but in thousands of one each fitting a thought in your mind.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Tania. I appreciate you liking this piece and relating. (:

[Tony Jordan]

I guess this might have been how Julian Assange felt all those many months in the Ecuadorian Embassy. Sanctuary had become prison.

good old captcha eh? lol
Good one Yumna.

p.s. some people in Life can provide us with metaphorical 'file in a cake' to aid escape.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting comparison, Tony. I remember really mulling over Assange's actions and what he would have gone through after all that happened...

Yeah ikr, it just caught my eye and kinda fits lol :P

Thank you for your words here, TJ. Always appreciated (:

[Mr.Writer]

A super powerful and emotional piece Yumna... It carries out realistically while informing the readers in an engaging and clear way!
This really speaks to many of us as our mind and thoughts take over and create images that look so real, but aren't... and can possibly ruin our lives.. make us think negatively and turn us into people we aren't
Well done Yumna, keep it up! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Shaan. I appreciate it :)

[Levi Levin]

Lots of creativity. Good work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I appreciate your words here (:

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome :)