Ephemeral

Experimental. Written off the top of my head...

Life smiles

when you do,

everything falls

back to place.

The sound of 

your distant breath;

ephemeral,

 yet...

lasting

~

an eternity...

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Just the word is a poem it seems. And then you paint the colors of light around it, and bring the moment to life. A breath. An eternity. All the world flowing in and out of focus. Written off the top of your head? What a brilliant space up there, dear poet. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Such lovely words, thank you so much for appreciating, Craig. Glad you like it ((:

[Coyote Poetry]

Realistic wisdom shared in the first lines. You are writing like the old Poet by the sea. With a experience pen. Leaving the reader with something to think about. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad my words made you think. Thank you for the kind words here too, Coyote. Truly appreciated (:

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.

[Carol Cashes]

Good Lord, just reread my first review. You deserve better than that. I think once I "clarified" the smile your first line contains to a " sincere" smile, it was perfect and perfectly true. I'm sorry my personal demon dictated my first response, but I will reiterate: her sound of her breath will last the eternity that is the remainder of my heart's beating.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Not at all, Carol. I loved your review! Thanks again (:

[Carol Cashes]

You poem is beautiful. Unfortunately, due to circumstances (i.e.: my mother's fast approaching death), I have a snarky attitude. Life does not always smile when you smile back. I hope that is true for you, but today, for me, not so much. But, you being you, and having the soul of a true poet, ended this perfectly: the sound of her distant breath will last the eternity that my heart lives. Final diagnosis: splendidly done, first reaction is my personal demon riding my back at this time, and solace is found in the final words. Well done...again. Thank you

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think it fluctuates with all of us. Life does smile when you see your loved ones happy, that is what I meant here so I totally agree with you.
I hope you find it in you to bear your mother's passing (though that indeed is unimaginable)
Thank you for your lovely words, Carol. I appreciate it (: Hugs .

[emmajoy]

As ever with your personal take on how life can and
should be. Such sweet phrasing - in fact, a hug of words

[Dr. YumnaKay]

A hug of words - that's a great phrase. Thank you for appreciating, Emma (:

[emmajoy]

I have to compete with your other reviewers, sometimes works!! My pleasure.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Lovely, tender words. Great unique formatting to the right and use of open-ended punctuation. Gives each line continuum- ephemeral but everlasting. "Life smiles..when you do"- such a beautiful line!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Annette. Glad you like the formatting too (:

[Tony Jordan]

It certainly smiles when some people do Yumna and since smiling is indicative of happy and happy is driven by good energy and energy is never destroyed - ergo eternal - then I concur on a scientific level.
On a feely level this reminded me of someone who makes me smile and I did...so thank you for that.
:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Interesting theory and I agree. Some things are just directly proportional ;)
I'm glad it made you smile, Tony. This was indeed written at a momentary happy time ;)
Thank you for your words here. Your review made me smile too 😊😊

[Tony Jordan]

Onions always smile - (see avatar) - people cry when killing onions because of this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao I still like the sleepy dog avatar more haha 😉😛
Seems more humane ;)

[Bala Gorthi]

I loved the way you have used the word ephemeral and attributing eternity to it in the end. I loved the message in it. Nicely done

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Bala. I appreciate your words here. Glad you like it 😊

[APOORVA]

wow!
this is too sweet
liked it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. Glad you like it (:

[Mr.Writer]

A fresh feeling that comes from this poem!
An emotional write as well...
Well done Yumna!
I really like all your experiments!! KEEP IT UP! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you do. Your appreciation means a lot (:

[Mr.Writer]

You're a really good writer :)
No problem