I carry you in my heart ~ still

Experimental. Prosepoem. Written as a palindrome accidentally :p

I carry you in my heart ~ still

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weaving around our unmet horizons as I dig my feet into the shallows to keep myself from falling down, while losing the sight of you ... and I've stopped dreaming of a nonexistent heaven 

in which - 

I carry you in my heart ~ still

Reviews

[Ed Von Wolff]

What timing or me to read this particular piece. I can not only relate, but I am in awe of your approach to it. This is very well written and powerful in only a few lines. "weaving around our unmet horizons" I am without words at this moment. Well done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I am very much humbled by your appreciation. Glad you like it and can relate. Thank you, Ed.

[Kelly Scheppers]

A gorgeous litany of words...has me tongue tied at the moment. So glad I came by!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your lovely words, Kelly. Glad you like it 😊

[Ken Simm.]

An excellent almost gossamer use of words which fit the emotions exactly.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here, Ken. I appreciate it :)

[lightsong]

Those kind of the poems which are written swiftly from the heart, reach into our hearts in the same swift tenderness, though the sadness of lost love is filled through the words, still it's sweetly touching.

Thank You for sharing these little beauties with us.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating this piece, Light. It was indeed written from the depths of my heart...read moreThank you for appreciating this piece, Light. It was indeed written from the depths of my heart...
Glad you like it.

[Mr.Writer]

Deeply expressed Yumna...
Your feelings and emotions come clear in this poem of yours and leaves a moment of silence for the readers
Well done, keep it up :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. I appreciate your words here :))

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[An owl on the moon]

They speak of "reading between the lines," and your lines are so full, like grapevines hung with clusters of their sweet and bittersweet fruit. How the taste lingers long after one swallows. Painfully beautiful.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting comparison. Thank you for feeling this write, Craig. I appreciate your words here :)

[An owl on the moon]

I'm always glad to see you posting, dear INTJ. When I was very young out in California we had grapes that hung from a trellis. Somehow your thoughts took me home again. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, then I'm glad it reminded you of home :)

[An owl on the moon]

May your writing bring you home too, always. :)

[apennylate]

Wanted to see this keep going, to be quite honest...
I dunno...
But the underlying tone to most of your recent writes...
A love(r) being behind a transparent sheet of unbreakable glass.
I always get the feeling of panging-longing, but tinged with a regrettable acceptance...
Moving on is hard, in ANY form, Whether it be with people, or our own emotions...
Abruptly, but well penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think you've summed up how I've been feeling lately quite well. And irdk when my writes had feelings incorporated in them while they used to be quite experimentally written lol... guess some people do change our entire perspective of seeing things ...
Thank you for your words here, D.

P.S I do think I should be writing something entertaining but can't come up with any lol :p

[apennylate]

Like you say, growth is part of everyday, and nothing shameful about that...
Aye, some people change EVERYTHING... I know this to be true with myself, at least...
You are welcome, and I hope you find some positive new-ground here soon...

P.S
Entertainment is subjective

[Dr. YumnaKay]

not shameful, I think it's just hard to accept sometimes...
Hopefully I will and yeah guess that's what I meant by entertainment ;p as in a positive write... ;)

[apennylate]

However you put it... It suckssss, heh
Write how you want, at the time you wan, and it will morph naturally on its own...
I look forward to w/e it is!

[Tony Jordan]

I saw a premature baby - not surviving - in this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Um what? Sorry I lost you here lol but I'm too sleepy :p
Thanks anyways haha 😛

[Tony Jordan]

shush....go to sleep.
lmao

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p noo tell me first or I won't 😎😎😛

[Tony Jordan]

Lol
I suppose you'll want a drink of water too...then you'll need to go to the toilet...then there'll be a monster under your bed or in your closet...lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

lmao there are always creepy monsters in my dreams ;p
you're funny lol

[Tony Jordan]

I have the most graphic and blood filled dreams Yumna. I am terrified in my dream but when I waken I kind of go "Wow! Gimme more!" lol - like a free fairground thrill ride haha.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah I have weird dreams of falling from a great height lol but your dreams sound interesting ;) :p

[Tony Jordan]

Hah - I don't do heights but I do have the weirdest urge to leap from cliffs whenever I peer over them. Apparently (so says Google) it's not uncommon and is in fact a safety valve !! Haha...mad.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ooh I would love going cliff diving! That is the only adrenaline related thing I haven't still tried lmao :P

[Tony Jordan]

You what !!??
I don't get it. lol
I like terra firma

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh I like that too but there ain't any adventure in it unless you go hiking or idk car racing lol hahah ;p

[Tony Jordan]

Have you never went cave exploring or pot-holing? I mean how much more of thrill would there be than having to slip through a crevice which is barely wide enough and perhaps get stuck and have a major panic-attack "Arrrgh, I'm gonna be stuck here forever ! HELLLP!" - Oh I have claustrophobic tendencies too by the way haha

[Tony Jordan]

So even coming up with that scenario has me in a cold sweat !! :S

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah I haven't lol after studying for around 12 years in school and 4 years in university I didn't get the time to have a life lmao it just begin hahah ;p
Hmm claustrophobic you say? I'm afraid of heights probably that's what kept me away from cliff diving ;)

[Tony Jordan]

You'll get all the thrills you need from working life Yumna, beieve me. It has all it's own rules and politics and etiquette and cliffs to dive or be pushed off of!!! *bring parachute*

[Tony Jordan]

*believe me* even...
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

hahahahah not even half the fun, TJ. It gets boring lol

[Kesha]

This is beautiful.. I really loved the softness of this

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Kesha. Glad you like it :))

[Kesha]

You are very welcome :)