One more time ...

Experimental. Sounds depressing but that's kinda the mood I am in lately...

One more time,

life crawls

as I remain edgy.

One more time,

your total silence

bounds me.

One more time,

I am drowning in

a web of miseries.

So, will you be back

~

one more time

One more time,

nights stroll

while I dream on.

One more time,

I lapse into

a never ending solitude.

One more time,

a kaleidoscope of promises

surround me.

So, will you hold me

~

one more time ...

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

"life crawls
as I remain edgy."

Absolutely best way to describe certain moods that come accompany depression and anxiety.

Moods usually pass, otherwise they become syndromes! I hope that's the case with you. You're a talented writer and if someone doesn't seem to appreciate you in all your tattered, flawed and wondrous glory - kill 'em in a poem! *laughing* I'm feelin' real maternal today, so I'll just say "Cheer up, honey. It'll work it self out...or not. Either way, you'll be fine."

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I wish I could really kill with my poems lol but sadly sometimes words seem too lame...
Thank you for feeling this write, Carol. I do appreciate your words always. 😊

[APOORVA]

touched once again.
you always write attractive.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your words here. I appreciate it :)

[apennylate]

A web of miserably promised night strolls... Or are they just lapses in drowning... One more time, and i am... Edgy. Dreamily penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It was kinda depressingly penned lol but yeah it comes off as dreamy too...
Thank you for your words here, Silente. I appreciate it :)

[apennylate]

Mostly your words, heh, and you are most welcome...

[Re-Pete]

i don't find this to be depressing. longing & dreamy perhaps. endearing. smooth, lovely writing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, I think it could be interpreted that way too. I'm glad you didn't find it depressing. Thank you for appreciating, Pete 😊

[Tony Jordan]

There are eight more times here - not including the title and yet with that special someone - that person who we feel 'gets us' liek not other, even 8 times might not make us turn away from them forever.
Perhaps it's witchcraft or some other higher power at work but as Elvis might have sang "We're caught in a trap!"...thank u very much... uh-huh

well done here Yumna.
:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol I just noticed that :p
And I agree, an eternity of one more times would be insufficient for that...
Thank you, Tony. I always appreciate your words 😊

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Poetic summary of when you are frightened to do something again because you had an unpleasant experience doing it the first time! Loved the flow of this write – a rhythmic pulse of energy pin pointing the flaws in an on/off relationship! :-)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I love how you interpret and summarize my writes and others' pieces in general!
Thank you for appreciating, Phill. Glad you like it :)

[Ken Simm.]

An evocative use of repetition here Yumna. The format helps both the flow and the subject. Giving it a tangible wistfullness.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Ken. I appreciate your words here 😊

[.]

Very nice indeed.

Soft and gently flowing and tinged with a gentle sadness throughout. Usually repetition of the same line can be a drawback on a poem, but it works exceedingly well in this case.

A fine write. Melancholic and full of longing hope.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Doodley. I'm glad you think the repetition worked here 😊

[Giulia King]

I remember your poems back in the day. They were special but this, this is one of a kind. I love what the cafe has done for you. You have changed for the better. I also love that you are growing as a writer. The future looks bright for you, dear friend.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm overwhelmed by your words, Gullia. Thank you so much 😘💜

[Najam Us Saher]

Loved the repitition of 'one more time' I really liked this.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Najam. Glad you did :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[Mr.Writer]

Another dreamy, emotional and soft poem Yumna...
I really enjoyed reading this, and your emotions were clearly expressed and shown throughout this...
Well done, keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it.