How often...

Experimental.

How often

those lies cross your lips,

invading the space between us.

How often

my veinless wrists grasp

onto the thin edges of your skin.

How often

I am, speechless

at the mystic aura

that surrounds you.

How often

I am, deceived

by the soft, brutal waves

that shake me to the core.

How often

I surrender;

to your lost touches

and woven lies...

Reviews

[emmajoy]

How amazing it is to learn so much by merely reading between the lies.. seeing them for what they are. Wonder if perhaps you, the writer, didn't want to let the YOU accept the truth.. 'I am, speechless ~ at the mystic aura ~ that surrounds you.'

When one meets an imagination that creates magic with language, one can easily be deceived!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think the mind often plays games or maybe we are prone to denial...
Thank you for your words and insight, Emma. I appreciate it :),

[emmajoy]

Perhaps careful denial is better than over-quick acceptance! An analytical mind might think too much but instincts are rarely wrong, especially when juggled by cynics who otherwise bray when things happen to them! .

[barleygirl]

WOW! Very powerful! Your writing is always beautiful & meaningful . . . but not so much focused into a detailed punch in the gut message. This one is very well crafted & structured & relatable to the core of one's heart (((HUGS)))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, BG. I'm glad you found it meaningful and relatable (:

[Carol Cashes]

Lies that invade the space between two people...excellent description. I liked this very much, but one question - why are your wrists "veinless"?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think "veinless" here describes the empty feeling, rather of being dead...
Thank you for liking. I appreciate your words here.

[Carol Cashes]

Oh...this neophyte and self admitted plebeian thanks you for clarifying what is most likely obvious to anyone but me. *laughing* I do want the points for not being afraid to ask...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

that makes me laugh because I think I am too :p I had to search the words you used in this comment ;)

[Carol Cashes]

*snort* I've used my dictionary more times since joining this site than I have in the past five years! But in my defense, I only use words I already know. I just look up words that others use so nonchalantly in their literary endeavors...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ditto! My use of words is quite simplistic being that English ain't my first language ;) but I do search up words when I read the brilliant write ups here and I think that includes yours too! ;P

[Carol Cashes]

*pshaw! Personally, in my opinion, your correct usage of "ain't" (to include the spelling) shows an excellent command of the English language.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Er I thought this was used commonly 😶
However, thanks again 😊

[OhSnapShley]

Lovely write! Another job well done, thanks for sharing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I'm glad you like it 😊

[J. J. Nightingale]

Yes, how often we surrender....well said..

Sometimes we realize we have taken enough.

Other times.. we don't seem to mind...sigh

REAL !!!!

J.J.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True.. Thank you for your thoughts here :)

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome Poet !!!.............

[Mr.Writer]

I love the imagery and emotions you've used across this poem Yumna!
Well done, keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it 😊

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[apennylate]

Hope all is well, Yumna...! Been a minute.
This had me evading the space between my mind and the lies that bind me in kind... Mystic auras and woven waves... How often, indeed... Vein-less wrists grabbing your thin skin... Dreadfully horribly wonderful imagery... Experimentally penned... (As always)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah of course, all good here :) hope for that your end too, Silente :))
Thank you for your words here. Always appreciated 😊

[apennylate]

That is good to hear, and of course... Never better...! Most welcome...

[Tony Jordan]

Very tactile Yumna.
I loved the phrase 'veinless wrists' !
I think evaded would be better if it were 'invading'...
Hi dear friend.
:))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Good to see you back, Tony!! Thank you for the suggestion and of course the appreciation. Always love to see your words on my pieces 😊😊

[Tony Jordan]

Good to see you front. xD
Always a pleasure my dear Yumna.
:))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So, will I get to review one of your latest pieces? That is, if you decide to post any lol 😛😎

[Tony Jordan]

I wrote 20 new ones but it got cold here so I put them in the garden incinerator. They are carbonised poetic molecules which may go to make a star one day...lol
(That's my excuse and I'm sticking with it hahah)
:DD

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So much for an excuse not to post lol 😶😛😎 I guess the 1% part of you that does crave for attention at times would be posting soon enough haha 😛😂 lol jk
It's okay ;) still I'll be the first in line :)

[Tony Jordan]

That 1% is the tail that's wagging the dog at the moment hahah.
You can have a ringside V.I.P. seat Yumna - if it ever happens lol.
Perhaps poetic-fibre will shift it. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha and here I am actually imagining a dog lmao 😂😂
It would have to be quite a certain fabric to really shift ;) :p

[Tony Jordan]

I never really liked that saying. I mean if the tail wags the dog - what is the tail anchored to? If nothing then the saying fails mechanically. If it is anchored then the tail is not the prime mover.
I think poetic-porridge will 'loosen' things...lmao...oops

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And I've always wondered why does a dog chase its tail if it is anchored to it lol I think there might be something in between ;)
So you are suffering from the dreaded 'constipation sensation'? Lol 😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - yes, it's fun to watch but dizzying.
When I used to imbibe - like seriously imbibe - my mother said I had victuallers constipation because I couldn't 'pass' a public house.

[Tony Jordan]

Oh and have you ever tried asking said dog why it is chasing it's own terminal appendage - has anyone?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Your use of the word 'imbibe' seems to have double meaning to me ;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Asked? Lol oh I haven't been within a close proximity to any dog 😶😛 unless you count some men as such 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Nooo ...lol
Dog's are much more honest and noble than man.

[Tony Jordan]

That reminds me of the old joke about the two dog's standing on the street corner when one shivers and says to the other -"Oh I'm going to sit now...here comes that b***h with the cold nose!"

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p haha yeah at least dogs can be loyal ;p

Would I be the b***h here? Lmao 😛😎

[Tony Jordan]

only if it's used as the acronym for
B.eing
I.n
T.otal
C.ontrol
H.oney...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao that almost makes saying anyone a b***h as a compliment 😛😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

I bet it was made up by someone in a hurry to avoid getting a black eye. The threat of violence sure can be a bellows to the flame of creativity hahaha.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ironic really that people love dogs yet hate being called a b***h lol

[Tony Jordan]

On that tangent - people love children who are born out of wedlock - but hate being called a 'bas*ard"...lol

[Tony Jordan]

and people love ice-cream but call someone 'cold'...lol
okay...enough haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah yeah people are weird really 😶😛

[Tony Jordan]

speak for yourself - I'm perfectly un-weird. Like totally un-weird. As un-weird as they come, I am.
:pp

[Tony Jordan]

weird that ....heh heh ;D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

There is a quote here in Urdu which could be roughly translated as 'you wouldn't find a mad man telling you that he is mad' lol.. Iykwim ;) :p
I was told that I'm weirdly arrogant so guess I am weird haha 😛😛

[Dr. YumnaKay]

On the contrary, I haven't really met an unweird person lol you must be the first I came by 😛😂

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - we have a similar quote - "There are wiser men locked up in the sanitorium".
Arrogance by itself is not very nice - like an omelette without salt or spices so I guess 'weirdly arrogant' is a much more palatable scenario Yumna. ;p

[Tony Jordan]

OOps did I say I was un-weird... I meant un-wired.
lmao

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And the real mad ones out in the open 😛😂
Oh well, being told that you're arrogant when you're not is bad enough too 😶

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah oh and I just today told someone that I'm 'weirdly wired' 😛 that makes us complete opposite, Tony! You being unweirdly unwired... Unwired could be taken as 'unhinged' too 😉😛😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

as an ancient garden gate...yes...lol...that's me.
Wires are passe - better go wireless Yumna.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh of course, to feel disconnected would be great lol without the burdens of those wires ;)

[Tony Jordan]

ahh ... I concur Dr Yumna...
To be disentangled and to float away into the ether...
bliss!

[Kesha]

I really love this piece, it's a soothing read (to me), nicely penned!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Kesha! Glad you like it :))

[Kesha]

You're welcome