till it's time ~ to sleep

Experimental. Again, written hastily... I'm probably sleep deprived ;P

wrap me in 

thunder clouds

raging ... ravaging ... 

fill me in

forgotten smiles

chuckling ... laughing ...

tuck me in

flowery blankets

caressing ... soothing ...

till it's time ~ to sleep 

Reviews

[William Liston]

I enjoyed this. The images are vivid and serene, even in the first stanza where you describe thunderous clouds. I like the uniform structure throughout as well as the virtual lack of punctuation in how it creates a disorganized feel, almost reflective of how one feels when sleep deprived. Overall, a soft write with a hint of madness. Well penned!

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, William. I really didn't think out the structure while writing... But I'm glad you like it. :))

[Mr.Writer]

So dreamy and soft... that's how I felt after reading this Yumna
Such imagery you've provided, those emotions that surrender the reader!
Well done, keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Shaan :)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Kesha]

This was beautiful and almost relaxing, I loved the images you painted with your words, great piece

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I appreciate your words here :))

[Kesha]

You're welcome :)

[BBP]

This was a good write yumna. You painted a beautiful story in short words!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Bev! Glad you like it :))

[emmajoy]

if sleep deprivation creates the above, you should ne'er sleep again, Yumna. This is silky beautiful and creates such colourful thoughts.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This made me smile :) thank you for this lovely review, Emma. Truly appreciate your words. I'll try to sleep though haha :p

[emmajoy]

Yes, yes. please do. Now the cricket's done for now, you can doze occasionally!