Meaningless

Experimental write. Inspired.

How meaning

less

the words you speak

 

that roll off your tongue

into nothing

nes

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s

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nd beyond ...

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nto my skin

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paper thin, dry tones

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I seek 

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the deeper meaning

with

in.

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Reviews

[apennylate]

I almost missed how well this was put together... Kinda distracted by the presentation style... Absolute gem...I would almost pull it all back together so the reader can fully appreciate the skillful meter... Regardless of style choice, it is void of filler that would otherwise mar a wonderfully blank show of apathy... Bravo

[Dr. YumnaKay]

While I wrote this, I really didn't think about the meter stuff so I'm glad it comes off good enough, what I was experimenting on was the breaking of words here, as in emphasizing over the word 'meaning - less', I thought it would create a stronger impact. I do appreciate your thoughts on this though :) Thank you so much for appreciating as always, Silente (:
Good to see you back around here btw :))

[apennylate]

Maybe meter was the wrong word, perhaps I should have addressed the word-splitting. It detracted from the overall "zing" of appeal and satisfaction one gets when a writer delivers a snappy line, or interesting thought congruently and smoothly. It "takes from" the impact. This is my opinion, but the nicer one constructs a read-able flow landscape, the more approachable it is for the average reader. Thanks, and I am around, just not super active at the moment

[apennylate]

Saw this and was surprised at how smartly put together it was, just had to put my nose in the door and say my two cents, heh

[Dr. YumnaKay]

hmm you have a point there. I agree. thanks again :)

[apennylate]

No problem, I really liked this one, and your style usually works... Just not this time, in my opinion... I hate feeling mean...! But it deserved solid criticism... Crazy evocation of relatable feeling in this one....

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p hahah seriously, I wouldn't have considered this a solid criticism if you hadn't said the word but okay, still appreciate it. I'll try rewriting it :)

[apennylate]

Oh, no, gosh... Do not re-write it... I meant solid criticism as in like... More than saying... "oh how emotional, this was great!" ...Solid criticism coming from ME... That makes it barely passable criticism in the real-world... Hah... A re-write would mess its perfectness up...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

oh my, you got me confused now... in the real world your criticism matters more than mine, that's for sure, dear friend ;)

[apennylate]

I have confused myself... Lol.. Just do not re-write anything on my account! Just think of it for next time... My criticism leaves people confused and bewildered... Not gonna call that a "win" in the real world game, haha... You are JUST as good of a writer, friend...! Your criticism counts for equal!

[Einstein Noodle]

my Da use to tell me to let hurtful words roll off "like water off a ducks back" :) i really appreciate the turn and closing in this ..we are very very powerful within .. if we hold to truth ... i will try to keep this one with me today as i go about my little business .. nice one Yumna!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Einstein. It's nice to let them roll off yeah. I'll keep your advice for today ;) (:

[Tony Jordan]

'my Da' - Bayjaysus E! I love that phrase.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha Onion head ... i do too ..and so blessed to have love for me Da :) and me Ma ...

[Tony Jordan]

Me granny and me granda too
:))

[Einstein Noodle]

yes indeed :))))

[Giulia King]

Short and powerful! Just what I like :) What I also really like is the way you write. It's like there's a new Yumna and you're not afraid to try something new :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Gullia :) your appreciation means a lot to me!

[Kesha]

I really liked this, short & simple but straightforward... like saying I don't care what you say, my mind is set.. I also liked the format of this one.. quite different

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, an interesting interpretation. Thank you for your kind words here, Kesha. Glad you like it :)

[Kesha]

You're very welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words and thoughts. I liked the need of the words. Would be nice to hear the truth. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, sometimes it's the words we need to hear...
Thank you for appreciating this write, Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are my dear friend.

[emmajoy]

Such an interesting form, Yumna! Your experimentation is taking you to so many places in this 'juggle' of thoughts!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you like my experiments, Emma. Thank you for appreciating. Truly means alot to me :)

[emmajoy]

I'd finding your 'experiments' absolutely fascinating, Yumna! One day, Richard may well advise the world that you've invented a new form of poetry! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That makes me smile :) Richard is really the one who showed me the direction of experimenting :))

[emmajoy]

There you go! Although he's so often very generous about this or that scribble of mine, i think he's given up trying to tidy my mind!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the deeper meaning is probably in the "unsaid"

it's in the eyes, the movement---

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Which we so often ignore...
Thank you for your insight, Jacob.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"How meaning
less."
Brilliant word play, meaning, form and flow of this poem. Words Meaning less. Who needs them? Great!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting interpretation! Thank you for appreciating this write 😊

[MsJewel]

There are those that just like to hear themselves speak...I like your description of "paper thin, dry tones". Well done my friend. :) Julie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Aye, so there are.. Thank you for appreciating this one too 😊