Rejection

Experimental yet again...

Fresh tears roll 

​from​

 my eyes

​,​

​the

 salty taste bitter on my lips

​,​

​t​

he reason of them 

​~​

 you

​.​

Shattered I am

​ ---

 like tiny shards of glass

​.​

​M​

y 

heart ~​​ 

crumbling within

​,​

  

the 

​'​

whys

​'​

 piercing

​ ​

my soul

​,​

clawing deep inside

~ this feeling of rejection ~

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Rejection.

Many of us have been there, others are lucky and may never taste the bitterness and heartache of it all.

What you have done her is capture the gutwrenching feeling with few words. I'll always come back to your work, not because I find your messages easy to understand, but your words which you use in these type of pieces are always seemingly perfect for the content of the piece.

Always a fan.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hello, Mark! Thank you for always appreciating my scribbles! Glad you like it 😊

[matrixmark]

Scribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong point of mine. But you always seem to nail it.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ lol maybe we could swap hahah

[matrixmark]

Would you like me to answer that....lol

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol maybe ;) :p

[matrixmark]

But it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do anything poetic.

Heres my poem for the year.

My name is ray,
way hey hey!!!

lol.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmaoo! Well at least you can rhyme 😛😉😂

[matrixmark]

That's my best. I thought it was funny, made me giggle a bit too.

Mark.

[rowan.taylorrr]

i love this so much, it's so relatable

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating :)

[Maria]

Perfect. Intriguing and very emotional indeed.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating 😊

[Maria]

Your most welcomed.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

i love this..i really love this...great work dear!..keep going and i could relate to this as well!...my favourite line was...''this feeling of rejection''....keep writing and keep sharing!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for liking. And of course I'll keep on writing lol :P

[apennylate]

Ok... Now I am reading everything backwards... Either I am convinced ALL poems work backwards... Or this DOES work the other way, as well... Amazing... Rejection is... I do not even have a clever review... I am just so confounded by the backwards perspective... Haha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

hahah no this doesn't work backwards lol
thank you, Silente. Glad I could astound you :P ;P

[apennylate]

It... It does, though...

[apennylate]

This feeling of rejection...
Clawing deep inside
The ​'​whys​'​ piercing​ ​my soul​
​M​y heart ~​​ crumbling within...
Shattered I am​...
Like tiny shards of glass​
​t​he reason of them...
...You...
​The salty taste bitter on my lips
Fresh tears roll ​from​ my eyes​...

[apennylate]

Do not tell me that DOESN'T work... Hahaha

[Dr. YumnaKay]

ahh well lol you made it out this way :P kinda yes, it is ;P so you'll be reading everything on wc backwards now hahah :p

[apennylate]

I blame you unequivocally...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I should be blaming someone too since it was someone from around here who pointed that out to me lol :P

[apennylate]

We blame them neurotically, then... Lol

[Kesha]

Ugh this was so heartwrenching to read, you can really feel the sadness in this piece, I liked the style of this however. Nicely written dear friend

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It was kinda sad to write too 'cause I usually don't write this way..
Thank you for feeling this write, Kesha. Appreciate your words.

[Kesha]

I bet /: and you're welcome!

[Priyanshi]

Very imaginative it is....I can imagine it very well...feeling of rejection is the worst,it shatters one completely....and i could feel it ,while reading this poem....one of your good work , Yumna.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Priyanshi. Appreciate your review.

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure .

[The Exiled Wolf]

Writing is the remedy to tough feelings - I can almost feel the bitterness flooding across the screen! Nice one Yumna!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is indeed. Thank you for feeling this write and for your words.

[emmajoy]

There's a somehow wisdom in this.. or maybe a inherent strength in spite of what you're saying.
You know the pain - ' ​the salty taste bitter on my lips​,​ ' you're dealing with it... as both experimental poet abut true human being. Fine, fine writing, Yumna.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah yes, I did for a while... Thank you for your kind words here, Em. Truly appreciate it.

[Giulia King]

Felt sad as I was reading this. I hope that this is just a poem and not how you really feel.
I feel like you could make this piece a bit longer, I would enjoy reading a bit more. Your words flow so lovely and elegant.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I wish I could make it longer too but like always words fail me. Thank you for liking, Gullia.