Many of us have been there, others are lucky and may never taste the bitterness and heartache of it all.
What you have done her is capture the gutwrenching feeling with few words. I'll always come back to your work, not because I find your messages easy to understand, but your words which you use in these type of pieces are always seemingly perfect for the content of the piece.
Always a fan.
Mark.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Hello, Mark! Thank you for always appreciating my scribbles! Glad you like it 😊
7 Years Ago
Scribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong.. read moreScribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong point of mine. But you always seem to nail it.
Mark.
7 Years Ago
I could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ l.. read moreI could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ lol maybe we could swap hahah
But it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do any.. read moreBut it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do anything poetic.
Heres my poem for the year.
My name is ray,
way hey hey!!!
lol.
Mark.
7 Years Ago
Lmaoo! Well at least you can rhyme 😛😉😂
7 Years Ago
That's my best. I thought it was funny, made me giggle a bit too.
Many of us have been there, others are lucky and may never taste the bitterness and heartache of it all.
What you have done her is capture the gutwrenching feeling with few words. I'll always come back to your work, not because I find your messages easy to understand, but your words which you use in these type of pieces are always seemingly perfect for the content of the piece.
Always a fan.
Mark.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Hello, Mark! Thank you for always appreciating my scribbles! Glad you like it 😊
7 Years Ago
Scribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong.. read moreScribbles you say. For me to do something like this would take years. Poetry will NEVER be a strong point of mine. But you always seem to nail it.
Mark.
7 Years Ago
I could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ l.. read moreI could say the same about me writing prose though I would love to make that my strong point :p :/ lol maybe we could swap hahah
But it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do any.. read moreBut it wouldnt be the same if I started doing poems.
You CAN write, I certainly CAN'T do anything poetic.
Heres my poem for the year.
My name is ray,
way hey hey!!!
lol.
Mark.
7 Years Ago
Lmaoo! Well at least you can rhyme 😛😉😂
7 Years Ago
That's my best. I thought it was funny, made me giggle a bit too.
i love this..i really love this...great work dear!..keep going and i could relate to this as well!...my favourite line was...''this feeling of rejection''....keep writing and keep sharing!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for liking. And of course I'll keep on writing lol :P
Ok... Now I am reading everything backwards... Either I am convinced ALL poems work backwards... Or this DOES work the other way, as well... Amazing... Rejection is... I do not even have a clever review... I am just so confounded by the backwards perspective... Haha
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
hahah no this doesn't work backwards lol
thank you, Silente. Glad I could astound you :P ;P
7 Years Ago
It... It does, though...
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This feeling of rejection...
Clawing deep inside
The 'whys' piercing �.. read moreThis feeling of rejection...
Clawing deep inside
The 'whys' piercing my soul
My heart ~ crumbling within...
Shattered I am...
Like tiny shards of glass
the reason of them...
...You...
The salty taste bitter on my lips
Fresh tears roll from my eyes...
7 Years Ago
Do not tell me that DOESN'T work... Hahaha
7 Years Ago
ahh well lol you made it out this way :P kinda yes, it is ;P so you'll be reading everything on wc b.. read moreahh well lol you made it out this way :P kinda yes, it is ;P so you'll be reading everything on wc backwards now hahah :p
I should be blaming someone too since it was someone from around here who pointed that out to me lol.. read moreI should be blaming someone too since it was someone from around here who pointed that out to me lol :P
Ugh this was so heartwrenching to read, you can really feel the sadness in this piece, I liked the style of this however. Nicely written dear friend
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
It was kinda sad to write too 'cause I usually don't write this way..
Thank you for feeling t.. read moreIt was kinda sad to write too 'cause I usually don't write this way..
Thank you for feeling this write, Kesha. Appreciate your words.
Very imaginative it is....I can imagine it very well...feeling of rejection is the worst,it shatters one completely....and i could feel it ,while reading this poem....one of your good work , Yumna.
There's a somehow wisdom in this.. or maybe a inherent strength in spite of what you're saying.
You know the pain - ' the salty taste bitter on my lips, ' you're dealing with it... as both experimental poet abut true human being. Fine, fine writing, Yumna.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Ah yes, I did for a while... Thank you for your kind words here, Em. Truly appreciate it.
Felt sad as I was reading this. I hope that this is just a poem and not how you really feel.
I feel like you could make this piece a bit longer, I would enjoy reading a bit more. Your words flow so lovely and elegant.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I wish I could make it longer too but like always words fail me. Thank you for liking, Gullia.