Oozing

Experimental Writing.

Words, fragmented​ ... still they broke me 

yours, pierced ... holding stitches on my side

which constantly bleeds, oozing...

 

feelings, evoked ... mere vapours ~

wisps; evaporated ... 

 

your words ~ my undoing.  

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

ouch....very emotive ..i feel the pain ...words can yield a deathly power can't they?! sigh!!
E.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So they can, more can anyone can imagine... thank you for your words here, EN. Appreciated (:

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

To be wrapped in such a life and be pulled on by one single string to dissolve what you thought was built

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You summarize the feeling well enough. Thank you for your thoughts..

[Chloe Powell]

I like this a lot because it's simple and short but at the same time, complex and deep. I love your word choice and overall the piece really flows. I also like your use of punctuation and how well you showed emotion. Amazing job and keep writing! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating this piece, Chloe. Glad you liked it :)

[Chloe Powell]

Thank you for creating it!

[asperatus_]

Left me wondering if this was about love or pain - read it several times and each left me feeling a different emotion. well done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This was more about the pain felt in love. Thank you for thoughts on this piece. Glad the emotions were felt.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

*your

[Hope]

Its a different poem, Yumna...
I loved it!
Great work...:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Naat. Appreciate your words here :))

[Hope]

my pleasure...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we keep wrapping our hearts in protective bandage...but some loves and those loves' words can split the bandages apart, tear the seams of the old wounds...and we bleed again.

quite visual here.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True indeed. Thank you for your thoughts here, Jacob. Truly appreciate it :)

[emmajoy]

What an amazing placing of words! Strange how brevity and a pause can light up meanings. Fine experiment, Yumna.. seems you can go all over space with your imagination.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your appreciation, Emma. Truly means a lot that you like my experimental writes. 😊

[Phill Oz O'fee]

This reminded me of some lines of lyrics from ‘The Last Time’ by RIHANNA:
Boy I thought that I knew you so very well
But you walked on my pride all the tears that I cried
And it cuts... like a knife
Excellently penned!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I haven't heard that song so thank you for sharing. I'll be sure to listen :) This write was probably inspired by a song I was listening at the time 'Stitches' by Shaun Mendes...
Thank you for appreciating :)

[Kesha]

It's amazing how simple words can do so much damage or even the lack of words which can hurt just as much...wonderful piece dear friend, sorry I have been busy as of late. 2 days off after today's shift :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True that. Words can work as dagger..
Thank you, Kesha. That's cool that you'll have an off 😊

[Kesha]

You're welcome and yes I am excited lol I am soooo tired today /:

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol maybe you'll get tired of resting too in your off hahah 😛😛

[Kesha]

Haha maybe xD

[apennylate]

Now this is pretty cool, adore the lilting word choice, and the fact it IS about words... Evaporation of feeling bleeds through like oozing piercings... Piercingly penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Wow, thank you. I like your review. Glad you liked the word choices here. :)

[apennylate]

I very much did...! You are welcome...