Search me...

Experimental writing...

Search me...

Search me...

and you may find me 

embedded in between your lips

​a​s I take in the taste of you;

devouring ~​ you are.

 

Search me...

in those lonely nights

​when I walked, following a shadow

​that turned out to be yours;

mesmerizing ~ you are.

 

Search me...

as you drift towards sleep

and I'll wake up 

resting on your eyelids;

intoxicating ~ you are.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Nice experiment, Yumna Dear! : )
Beautifully suggestive first verse to warm the imagination just right; then, verse two kept imploring that we "search" you … there's a thought in itself worth entertaining … LOL!
Verse three implores again as the crescendo soothes to a soothing climax.
I loved how you wrapped-up each verse with a titillating descriptive of your lover … those three words engender a visually appealing poem in themselves.
I especially enjoy it when you let your pen take the reins of your amazing imagination … the picture adds a soft ambience to the feel, too!

I've missed your poetry! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Richard. I'm grateful to you for bringing out whatever little poetic voice I do have :)read moreThank you, Richard. I'm grateful to you for bringing out whatever little poetic voice I do have :)
Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊

[Richard🖌]

And, You mean a lot to me! : )

[Kesha]

Wow Yumna, I really enjoyed this piece, it was sensual and led the reader to be imaginative. Wonderfully penned :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Kesha. Glad you liked it. Truly means a lot 😊

[Kesha]

You are very welcome :)

[Mr.Writer]

Woah! This poem intoxicated me as well :D
It was so good Yumna! The way you repeated "you are" and "search me" it enhanced the poem!
Well done!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you liked it :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my, "find me embedded in between your lips"
i wish i had written that...

i surely do.

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a huge compliment! Thank you for your nice words here, Jacob. Truly humbled, I am 😊

[barleygirl]

I love the way you've crafted this with an original structure, repeated for each stanza, yet also new & interesting observations in each. The way you state your observations is very original ("embedded between your lips as I take in the taste of you"), even tho the ideas are very relatable. I especially love the inverted sentence structure of the last line for each stanza . . . it emphasizes your well-chosen descriptors (devouring, mesmerizing, intoxicating).

[Dr. YumnaKay]

With each passing day I find myself experimenting more and more, perhaps this was brought on by that restlessness creeping on the edges of my mind.. I'm glad you noticed that inverted sentence structure. Thank you so much for appreciating each of my pieces, BG. I'm humbled by your words :)

[barleygirl]

Being old & lazy, I find myself seeking the comfort of my "usual" poetic style . . . it takes a lot of energy to push beyond our natural tendencies & keep trying new things. I admire you & am inspired (((HUGS)))

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I really can't decide on one specific style but hey, calling yourself lazy would be a huge understatement, BG! That's being modest when you know that so many of us around here are inspired by you :))
Hugs back :))

[Giulia King]

This is so beautiful, Yumna! Easily one of my favorite poems by you

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Gullia! I'm glad you like it. Your words mean alot to me :)

[George Coombs]

Well constructed and clearly written with the repated phrase adding feeling and sensitivity -excellent work

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating. 😊

[George Coombs]

Your welcome

[Jibey]

Cleverly constructed, with the repeated phrases working like a chorus to drive home the message. Some lovely images give the poem some substance - 'the taste of you', 'resting on your eyelid'. The verbs 'Devouring', 'Mesmerizing', 'Intoxicating' are appropriately strong as the language of love.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Jibey. Glad you liked it 😊

[emmajoy]

' .. resting on your eyelids.. '

Also: invigorating, exciting and inviting, Yumna - seems your new routine has added even more light to your fertile imagination. I iove the honest clarity of this post.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would say that new routine has dimmed the light 'cause I write even less...
Thank you for liking this experimental piece, Emma. Truly means a lot 😊

[emmajoy]

There's a saying, 'less is more' (Still learning how to use that quote myself, believe me!). Your latest post is pure and crystal clear, Yumna, not rambling wordage for the sake of cleverness.