Nice experiment, Yumna Dear! : )
Beautifully suggestive first verse to warm the imagination just right; then, verse two kept imploring that we "search" you … there's a thought in itself worth entertaining … LOL!
Verse three implores again as the crescendo soothes to a soothing climax.
I loved how you wrapped-up each verse with a titillating descriptive of your lover … those three words engender a visually appealing poem in themselves.
I especially enjoy it when you let your pen take the reins of your amazing imagination … the picture adds a soft ambience to the feel, too!
I've missed your poetry! ⁓ Richard : )
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Richard. I'm grateful to you for bringing out whatever little poetic voice I do have :)read moreThank you, Richard. I'm grateful to you for bringing out whatever little poetic voice I do have :)
Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊
I saw the thumbnail photo and it really caught my eye! That's neat af.
This is beautiful and somewhat creepy for some reason all at the same time. I actually really like this! Your choice of words are so fitting!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
At your mentioning creepy, I read it again and it does sound like it lol kinda like the vampire feel.. read moreAt your mentioning creepy, I read it again and it does sound like it lol kinda like the vampire feel 😛😛
Thank you for liking this piece, Nerissa. Truly appreciate it 😊
7 Years Ago
I was thinking more stalker feel, but vampire too. haha.
You're welcome!
7 Years Ago
Hahah then it's a romantic stalker 😂😛
7 Years Ago
Yeah, man. I don't know, maybe I'm just messed up in the head and look at everything darkly, but it.. read moreYeah, man. I don't know, maybe I'm just messed up in the head and look at everything darkly, but it did seem like a romantic stalker type of vibe haha
7 Years Ago
Lol no that's an interesting thing 😉 if only a stalker exists who is romantic too 😂😂
7 Years Ago
Stalkers are kinda romantic... Until they start leaving dead birds on your porch. XP
Search me and you may find sleepless alleys, mesmerizing oddities... Embedded betwixt lips, lonely nights and forlorn shadows... A succinct and drifting write about the devouring nature of "me"... Intoxicatingly penned...
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Silente. I appreciate your words here :)
Reads like an enchanting dreamscape. Weaving soft , beckoning tendrils around the reader..."and I'll wake up..resting on your eyelids" -Magical and Perfect!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Annette. Truly appreciate your words on my piece :)
There is a subtle intensity throughout that keeps the reader curious of what's next. A level of intrigue that holds steady. You want to keep reading. You're hooked until the end which is always a good thing. Great job
Very song-like. I can't quite find the deeper meaning here, but I certainly love how this poem is constructed and how it is executed. I wonder who the "you" is...