A Night of Broken Sleep

A Night of Broken Sleep

Longer nights, shorter days,

wishes of dreamless sleeps. 

Thoughts of you kept creeping in

until I heard the cuckoo's cry.

It was to be ~ a night of broken sleep

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Ragged breaths; stolen moments,

your mesmerizing eyes; penetrating, 

swallows me whole, consuming

a mass, filling the void I was floating in.

It was to be ~ a night of broken sleep.

Hurricane of love; wrecking hearts,

missed beats while grazing your face.

My hand itching to smooth the creases 

etched on your frowning face; amidst all,

it was to be ~ a night of broken sleep.

Reviews

[William Liston]

Oh my ... First of all, this poem has one of the most enthralling visual presentations I've ever seen. I've read many pieces with a beautiful picture and beautiful typography to match, but I find this one especially pleasing ... perhaps it's the variance of the colors.
As for the poem itself, I found it just as captivating as the visual. I loved the repetition and how it hit at the end of each stanza. I also loved the subtle contrast among the stanzas and how they worked to convey a similar theme. The final stanza had to be my favorite though, because I liked the mix of love, comfort, and sorrow interwoven within.

This piece reminds me of a quote by Rumi:

“When I am with you, we stay up all night.
When you're not here, I can't go to sleep.
Praise God for those two insomnias!
And the difference between them.”

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I wasn't aware of that quote, so thank you for sharing that here. And thank you for appreciating this piece too. The last stanza is close to me as well 😊
I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Jibey]

A good description of the impact of being sleepless - with the imagination and feelings working overtime and the vision of another presence - an object of love. I liked the tender touch of smoothing the creases and hope the frown was an indication of worry, not of disapproval.

I liked the line 'missed beats while grazing your face'.

I sympathize. It's 4 am here.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

well you interpreted right. It was meant as worry and not disapproval..
I'm glad you like it. Thank you, Jibey :)

[Kesha]

Awww this is so cute 😄😄 I love it! What a wonderful piece, what a wonderful reason to be tossing and turning in the night, unable to sleep with that person on your mind! A great write as always my friend, I love reading your works 😁

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It can be irritating to you know lol :p
Thank you for liking this one, Kesha. Your review made me smile :))

[Kesha]

Lol I know :p you've gone so cheesy ;) lol
& you are very welcome :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

hahah I'll try not to be from onwards ;) lol

[Kesha]

Lol your cheesy ones are good too :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

well then let me challenge you to write something cheesier than this hahah :p

[Kesha]

Haha okay I will take up that challenge tomorrow when I get the chance ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Cool! I look forward to that ;) :)

[BBP]

Amazing as always Yumna. So delicate and powerful!


Perfect balance! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Bev. It's powerfully sappy haha 😛
Glad you liked it 😊

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Someone is very lucky to have you care that much for them, under a broken night of sleep.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm I feel I am the lucky one here 😊
Thank you...