The Beginning of a New Tomorrow

   

                   

The world had always

clawed at her deepest desires, 

wherein she kept them 

hidden in her heart

​,

​​

afraid, that if she voiced them, 

she would be rendered dumb; 

robbed of the power of her voice..

​.​

 

​​

until, it dawned on her; 

to be fearless and to 

rely on her strength.

And she stood 

facing the shore

​,

​as a​

 deep calm washed over her

​.​

The beginning of a new tomorrow

​;​

​the

 rising sun glowing in her eyes

​,​

​a​

s she took in the beauty of the world

​.​

She had missed it; among all the chaos

​...​

​now

, 

​she embraces it.

A sigh crosses her lips,

as she vows, 

to never let go...​

 

https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-unverhill-04-18-2017     

Thank you, J Todd Underhill for giving voice to my little piece 😊 

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

So profound and beautiful! The image and the words reflect each other...Lyrical form and flow- lovely and original! "The world had always clawed at her deepest desires"...she may have retreated to heal....she recovered and re-entered a better, stronger self..."she vows never to let go"...Love it! Brava!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your lovely words here, Annette. Truly appreciate it :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You are very welcome-Well-deserved words for sure!:)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

The beginning of a new tomorrow holds such promises. I believe you can do anything

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, it does hold so much more... thank you :))

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Compelling and elegant!
It is beautifully portrayed.
"
The beginning of a new tomorrow​;​

​the rising sun glowing in her eyes​,​

​a​s she took in the beauty of the world​.​

She had missed it; among all the chaos​...​"

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Tazeen. Glad you liked it 😊

[Mr.Writer]

Like Sammi said... a breathtaking piece!
So much beauty and emotions flowing in this poem... it's amazing!!
"The beginning of a new tomorrow​;​
​the rising sun glowing in her eyes​,"
I could totally visualize these lines in my head.
I felt that you described the situation really well and gave the readers a chance, to have images created in our head and enjoy this fantastic poem!
Keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad you could visualize the imagery. Thank you for appreciating, Shaan. Means a lot 😊

[William Liston]

I'm in love with the feel of this piece ... everything melds together so nicely. This piece captures how it feels to break free from our mental cages, regardless of what others may think. I like how the imagery in the second stanza brings out that sense of freedom while also conveying the calmness and reflective regret that goes along with it.

Quick question: Was the visual presentation (with the words aligned to the right instead of the left) meant to illustrate the poem's theme — how the woman finally feels free to express her thoughts in whatever way she wants, regardless of how unusual it may be?

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

No, it was more because of the direction the woman is looking that I placed the words in the right side.. But your interpretation is nice too..

Thank you for liking this piece too, William. Your words mean a lot to me 😊

[Kesha]

Wow Yumna, this was amazing, I loved how serene it makes me feel, so peaceful & inspiring. Nicely written, happy you're back 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I decided writing out what I feel wouldn't hurt for once 😉
Thank you, Kesha. Glad you like it 😊😊

[Kesha]

It paid off :) you are welcome

[Kesha]

Since I already reviewed this piece, just wanted to say that I love that this is your featured piece! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

:p it seemed right for the moment ;p
Thanks again, Kesha 💜

[Kesha]

Yes it does :) and you're welcome! ^.^

[Jibey]

Written with strength and authority, and nicely presented ... and powerful image of wonderment and discovery, of learning all the worth of feeling...

I read this with great pleasure...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I'm glad you found pleasure in reading this 😊

[emmajoy]

' .. as a​ deep calm washed over her​.​ ~ The beginning of a new tomorrow​;​ .. .. .. '

I think both fragility and sensitivity miraculously turns into determination in these beautifully laid words. At first, there's a hint of wondering what and why.. but then, a distinct air of moving into your own chosen direction. Brava!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That determination is what holds me now, Emma.
Thank you for your uplifting words here. Truly appreciate it 😊

[emmajoy]

So glad to read that, Yumna. Keep happy and safe..

[Bala Gorthi]

It takes a lot of courage to break out from the clutches of fear. Once done, one can be at eternal peace and make a new beginning.
It is a wonderfully crafted write , very touching and soothing for me. I can feel the write.
Well done, Yumnakay. Thank you for sharing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree. It does take a lot of courage...
Thank you for your appreciation, Bala. I'm glad you found this piece soothing 😊

[Richard simpson]

Cool; I like the essence you bring to the table to this dramatic and influential piece. It's surely a great work of art and literature.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating! Glad you liked it 😊😊

[Tony Jordan]

Having the veil lifted from our eyes - our mind - can be scary-overwhelming or overwhelmingly wonderful. It takes courage to not try to quickly replace it. The reader can feel the freedom and the wonder in this.
It's very heartfelt and beautiful Yumna.
Bravo !

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It can be scary. Depends on the person..
Thank you for your words here, TJ. Glad you like it 😊