Devoid of Emotion

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Devoid of Emotion

Your betrayal,

the final nail 

in our love's coffin …

my heart's

now devoid of 

emotion.

What I'd thought of,

as brimming love,

'twas but mere illusion!

You made me drink, 

through your mystical eyes,

that deathly dark potion

of naïve emotion ...

which tore my soul apart,

freezing its heart

beyond repair!

     

     

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Again, in a time yesteryear i would resonate with this. Ive been there myself, and was tricked by the fake who stood in front of me at the time. It hurts yes, it gets better...yes (happiest ive ever been now)
But when all is said and done. THEY are the the ones who will suffer the guilt and karma will come.

I do like your use of words with this....it has a very dark feel too it.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm saddened to know you can relate with my words here. But thank you for the appreciation, Mark. Means a lot 😊

[Giulia King]

This is beautiful, Yumna! I see a change in you and I'm happy for you :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah what? You're happy that I'm now devoid of emotion?? 😂😂 I'm kidding, Gullia, thank you so much!
It means a lot to me 😊😊

[Kesha]

I'm not sure but it feels like there is still more to be said, either way this was a wonderful and heartbreaking piece! It would suck to be left with no emotion! Nicely written :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It does seem incomplete to me too..
Sometimes, having no emotions is good too..
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you :)

[Kesha]

I suppose it can be, I've always been one to try and feel it all, to feel everything. You are welcome

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That would be your Cancerian trait overpowering you ;) :p

[Kesha]

Haha could be ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

it is ;p I would know I just buried mine lol :p

[Kesha]

In your backyard with a shovel? Lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha yeah something like that ;P it'll probably crop up soon lol

[Kesha]

Lol the rain will wash it up ;P

[emmajoy]

Such a heartbreak of words.. emotions raw and weeping. Is what I call sadly beautiful, words laid explicitly but never to slicing through reality. You have a magic pen, YumnaKay.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciating, Emma. I would gladly exchange this magic pen with a magic wand to change some things for some people here...
Your words mean a lot to me 😊

[emmajoy]

Have thought the same for most of my years at the café.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And I for the few months I've spent here...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Very sad poem, very sad story of heartbreak.
I like the way you have described the way the heartbreak felt.
I really like the rhyme scheme and the way the poem was set out.
Nice picture at the end to.
Filled with meaning and tons of emotion this poem.
Well done keep writing :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Cimmy! I'm glad the words touched you. Really means a lot to me 😊

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome :) I'm glad

[Surya]

Wow...I guess it would be less for your write from me, and truly in love with this one, specially the last stanza.....:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Surya! What do you mean 'less from your write for me'? Aren't you going to read anymore of mine? 😂😂
I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Surya]

Haha, no I don't mean such, I mean to say wow is a small word i could say to your write...That's it, i always love to read your experiments, writes....:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol okay I misunderstood 😂😂
Experiments is a good word 😊
Thanks again 😊😊

[Surya]

You are welcome Yumna..:)

[Stacy Purvis]

What an incredible piece...directly from a suffering heart in need. Thank you for opening a window and allowing us to peer inside, if only for a moment.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Anastasia! It's good to write sometimes what you feel..
I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Stacy Purvis]

very much so.

[Ardra]

What I'd thought of,
as brimming love,
'twas but mere illusion!


Wonderfully done yummy ...;)
Some people are just waste of our precious time

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True indeed. Some people are...
Thank you so much for liking, Ria! Means a lot to me 😊

[Jes' Pi]

Naive emotion...I liked it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Emotions are naive 😉
Thank you for liking 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

This poem is rich in words and emotions as well.
What I'd thought of,
as brimming love,
'twas but mere illusion!
These lines are my favourite.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Najam! I'm glad you liked the emotions in this one 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy this poem.
"You made me drink,
through your mystical eyes,
that deathly dark potion
of naïve emotion ..."
I do understand the above lines. Mystical eyes had stole my heart a few times. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

These mystical eyes are what hoodwinks us too often..
Thank you so much for liking, Coyote. 😊

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.