Devoid of Emotion

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Devoid of Emotion

Your betrayal,

the final nail 

in our love's coffin …

my heart's

now devoid of 

emotion.

What I'd thought of,

as brimming love,

'twas but mere illusion!

You made me drink, 

through your mystical eyes,

that deathly dark potion

of naïve emotion ...

which tore my soul apart,

freezing its heart

beyond repair!

     

     

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Again, in a time yesteryear i would resonate with this. Ive been there myself, and was tricked by the fake who stood in front of me at the time. It hurts yes, it gets better...yes (happiest ive ever been now)
But when all is said and done. THEY are the the ones who will suffer the guilt and karma will come.

I do like your use of words with this....it has a very dark feel too it.

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm saddened to know you can relate with my words here. But thank you for the appreciation, Mark. Means a lot 😊

[Hope]

A wonderful poem.
The strong emotion is very well communicated.
I enjoyed.:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed 😊

[Hope]

My pleasure..

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

And slowly but surely the heart will thaw at a cautious careful pace, how beautiful it turns colors from blue to pink

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nah, in this case it's permanently blue lol 😉😛

[Poeticme]

Ah!!!....Something many can relate to I'm sure, once again a beautiful piece of writing from you. I enjoy when I read your work...It always takes me away, or reminds me of a time...Wonderfully penned my friend

Poeticme

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm much humbled by your comments. Glad you like it 😊😊

[Poeticme]

Your very welcome my friend...Love the frozen heart pic, fits like a glove😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I love it too 😊😊

[Michael G. Smith]

Cryogenic love? I'm sure we've all experienced this as I like to dub it "false forevers". If some haven't it is inevitable. You've captured the essence it her as always.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True.. It is inevitable..
Thank you for appreciating, Michael. Means a lot 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

I always hated it when I gave my whole heart and the girl would always say "I Love You forever" and then two months later she is saying I don't love you anymore, What?! I mean at least have the decency not to use the "forever" word!! Lol. It's better to love then to never have loved at all.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahahah girls generally are sugary when it comes to love lol.. And 'forever' is a good word to make the guy fall 😉😉😂

[Michael G. Smith]

I wrote a poem titled Forever

You and I like "forever"
Once were, two words read moreI wrote a poem titled Forever

You and I like "forever"
Once were, two words
But now, we are one

[BBP]

Of course the title reeled me in, but you played the words well. Pouring the last bit of blood from a frozen heart!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like how you put that! I'm intrigued.. Why did the title reeled you in? 😯
Thank you for appreciating 😊😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol *reel...

[BBP]

Devoid of emotion...... just speaks to me, I can relate and have been told this exact thing to describe me a time or two lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh right, interesting! I'm called heartless lol

[BBP]

LMAO... yep that's names been used on my behalf as well.

I choose to call it 'controlled' lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah I just accept it as I really am most of the times 😂😂

[BBP]

LOL It's a good thing, means we are oversensitive crybabies! lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah no!!! That doesn't fit for me, Bev lol I'm like that in the writings only 😉😉😂😂

[Tina H.W.]

Whoa! Powerful! You always manage to make the reader "feel" your words, Yumnka. I think we all, at least once in our lives will or have experienced this. As I said, powerful and sharp; very emotive.
Love the frozen heart picture, too! It delivers impact.
Love your poetry. Short but truly emotional.
Wonderful!! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad I made you feel my words, Tina. Thank you so much.
I like the frozen heart too! Kinda like what my heart is like these days 😉
Truly appreciate your words 😊

[Tina H.W.]

Aw, we all feel like that from time to time. I guess it all help to create and write create poetry such as yours :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Of course.. It does help reflect..

[Tina H.W.]

I think I understand..:)

[M P Ramesh]

Yunankay,

There are , of course , certain understandings and its success and failures . When it matters for a creative attempt the deep truth inside such might be upheld without nostalgia.
Any how the concern of genuine emotion which generates the inspiration or shall we call the URGE for an attempt is not ruled out.
A writer will have to be subjective and objective at the same time like double minded "THOMAS"
He/she has no escape from the said gossip.
Take it easy.......

create it honestly and win over such ....
carry on.........

mp

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Err right.. Are you always that cryptic or it's just for my writings?
Thanks anyways for reading..

[M P Ramesh]

I read and do comment.
nothing more because I also imbibe something afresh always
otherwise keep silence.

mp

[apennylate]

Starting to almost feel a beat in your freestyles... This was another one that impressed with the word choice and emotional landscape made... Have you ever tried free-writing to a beat or instrumental? Might be fun, who knows... Either way...Darkly penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm no I haven't.. I find my mind clouded when listening to music to write..
Thank you for liking, Silente. I appreciate your words 😊

[apennylate]

Mmm... I find the same issue arises from spoken music, I can only do it with instrumentals and actual "beats"... So I understand that feeling, heh... You are welcome...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm that explains your unique style of writing. The words do sound like beats..😉😊

[apennylate]

Aye, well, the influence of my friends who are on record labels, and produce beats as well... Is heavy on me, so that is also another part, hah... I would very openly suggest trying it... Could not hurt... I was an avid lover of "normal" poetry 'till I found free-form with beats... So who knows, you might enjoy it, you might not... Either way, have a great day, YummyK.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, thank you for the suggestion, Silente. I sure will 😊
I never read a word of poetry my whole life until I joined this site last year lol 😛😂

[apennylate]

...Seriously...?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yup seriously.. Unless you count those Shakespearean sonnets which were compulsory in school 😛

[apennylate]

No one enjoys compulsory anything... Hah, I... Am quite stunned by that... You are probably what, mid 20's...? That is incredible... To go that long without poetry... Wow... Well, I am glad you found it, and you have an excellent inner-muse at your disposal, as well... So keep at it!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm younger than that lol early 20's 😉😛
Yeah I'm glad too that I found it 😊😊

[Mr.Writer]

Very true! Very true! I agree with this fab poem of Yumnas, 'twas a very dark poem yumna, very dark'
Great job Yumna! This is my fav line!!
"What I'd thought of,
as brimming love,
'twas but mere illusion!"
Expresses alot of stuff! It's pure lies, the lies that your lover says he'll fulfill, but never does

Keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for this poetic review, Shaan. Made me smile.
I agree, it's mostly just lies.. I appreciate your words :)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem!