Empty Hands

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Reviews

[Ardra]

That fear of losing you, kept me from breathing freely...
You didn't let me. Even though I asked to let me soothe your aching heart. You pushed me right out, as I watched those dreams fall off my hands... disappearing into a never ending mist of oblivion


Mmmm this speaks to my soul yumna....feel like you wrote it only for me .... :)
I love how deeply you get into the subject... and love reading your work...keep sharing your wonderful work ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Ria! Your words mean a lot to me 😊😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like waking up with fists clenched---trying to hold on to something that was---but now---the dreams have loosened the grip---clenched hands cannot recover.

j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True.. Thank you for adding your thoughts here, Jacob. I appreciate it 😊

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your poetry is like sad romantic heartbreaking storys,
So so full of so much emotion, which makes for great poetry.
I enjoyed reading this :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh I like to fluctuate between writing romance and heartbreaks 😉
Thank you so much! I'm glad the emotions touched you here as well 😊

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your very much welcome.
I can see that haha.
Keep writing :)

[duff]

Sadness wrapped tightly in intelligent mystique is how I would describe this. This is great. Nice job

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for appreciation, duff! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[duff]

You are very welcome my friend! I forgot to mention I like the artwork too

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like it too 😊

[Jibey]

Lost love is often the stuff of poetry and here you capture the sense of loss very powerfully. 'I watched those dreams/ fall off my hands' - poignant words.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is indeed.. Thank you for appreciating, Jibey. I'm glad it touched you :)

[Diamond]

Beautiful string of thoughts that you drew between both the ends of the poem. And I see that you did not stick to a single emotion across the poem. It is indeed a versatile piece. One small correction I think is...No need of the word time after twilight. Twilight itself is a time of the day. Very well done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are indeed correct about the error. I overlooked it..
Thank you so much for the appreciation, Queen! Your words mean a lot to me 😊

[Ken Simm.]

You use your experience to create the most stunning romances.
This is poignant and filled with a sense of ultimate loss. Wonderful is perhaps not the right word for such a sad piece but I hope you know what I mean.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Ken! I truly appreciate your words 😊

[An owl on the moon]

How your words felt like a path, at once worn down, and yet at times wild in the meadow. And how the path seemed to end in an empty, barren place where even in the looking back, one got lost in the longing. So beautifully bittersweet.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

At times, loves leaves us like that...
So very thankful for your beautiful thoughts here, Craig! Truly appreciate it 😊

[An owl on the moon]

Yes, it's too true. And somehow it lingers on in those distant dreams.

[LKBillips]

Achingly beautiful. I have the feels. :) Well done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad it touched you 😊

[A.L.]

I can feel this writing coursing through me, for it seems I keep taking the position of the person who shuts others out. This is interesting for me to be able to see this contrasting perspective and affect I may have.
Thank you for the read YumnaKay.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I have been often enough at the other end but now, at the receiving end makes the blow fall harder...
I'm glad you feel the contrast. Thank you for sharing your thoughts here, DD. I appreciate it..