Empty Hands

Free Verse...

Reviews

[Ardra]

That fear of losing you, kept me from breathing freely...
You didn't let me. Even though I asked to let me soothe your aching heart. You pushed me right out, as I watched those dreams fall off my hands... disappearing into a never ending mist of oblivion


Mmmm this speaks to my soul yumna....feel like you wrote it only for me .... :)
I love how deeply you get into the subject... and love reading your work...keep sharing your wonderful work ..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Ria! Your words mean a lot to me 😊😊

[Chris Shaw]

"you pushed me right out", those words speak to me of someone not prepared to fully commit. So much warmth and love on offer and yet your words left a sense of rejection. Empty hands indeed Dr Y. Well conveyed emotions here.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It certainly was that at that time...
Thank you so much for your words here, Christine. Always appreciated.

[Chris Shaw]

Always a pleasure to read you.

[Ted Kniffen]

Over here, there is a saying "Cold hands...warm heart." I suppose after reading this we could change that to "empty hands...empty heart."
Well done, Doc...it reminded me of a time...I could have been more thoughtful.
A good write.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for appreciating and your words here, Ted. Glad you like it :)

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Perhaps they have slipped through your fingers.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

So they did...

[R. J. North]

I yearned to ease your pain;
your sufferings
added to my burdens

This is so perfect to me, like loving someone so much that they're almost a part of you. Like you share in their good and bad times like they're your own. But it surely does hurt to lose someone and feel like you've lost a part of yourself as well.
I like this!(:

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You've summed it up so accurate. I completely agree.
Thank you so much for the appreciation and for adding your thoughts here. Glad you like it 😊

[Mr.Writer]

Beautiful... fantastic... engaging...
"That fear of losing you,
kept me from
breathing freely..."
Yumna! This verse made me breath heavy... omg... lol... This poem was outstanding! This poem, as a free verse, wow... Perfect! :)
Keep it up!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Shaan! I'm glad you like it.
Means a lot 😊😊

[Poeticme]

Very beautiful​.... Thanks for sharing this lovely piece, very poetic, makes my heart smile to read such wonderful words

Poeticme

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you. I appreciate your words. 😊

[Muskurahat]

It's like you kept your heart outside...The words gorgeously knit together to create a great meaning out of true feelings...The feeling of loosing someone, the one whom we used to love the most, more than ourselves and the pain of loosing that person...The feeling of getting dumped and the fear of breaking dreams....Very well presented ...All the best for your upcoming work...Waiting eagerly for them

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Not true feelings.. Just wordplays. But I'm glad you felt the impact of them. Thank you for the appreciation and your thoughts here. 😊

[Tony Jordan]

The wonderful Donovan wrote 'You might as well try and catch the wind...' - your sentiments here echo this somewhat and the reader is left in no doubt that such wisdom - such an epiphany - such a revelation is bought at a very high price - heartbreak.
Lovely relatable piece my friend :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for this thoughtful review, Tony. It's sad too that you can relate but yeah, heartbreaks come at a high price..
I appreciate your words always 😊

[Tony Jordan]

I wonder if we can 'move' our focus of our love - away from the heart to say - the appendix - that way if we remove the appendix we can remove the pain of an appendix-break.
hmmm...

welcome Yumna :D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahahah brain would be a nice exchange too since we hardly use it, so it won't hurt to remove it 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Yeah - well... some people dont use it... lmao - hey the a*s...? Then we could laugh it off - laugh off a*s-break.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You don't use it either 😂 a** is a somewhat useful thing 😂😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Did you know that we are all born a******s? lol
True factoid - the anal sphincter is one of the first 'parts' that develops in the womb - hahaha

[Tony Jordan]

Some of us dont progress beyond that !!!
Hahah - got in before you...Yumna

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Grr I think this is TMI!! 😂😂😂
And you're forgetting - I know anatomy lol

[Tony Jordan]

Who is Anth...ant...anatomy?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol it's the most irritating per.. I mean subject 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

and the most sexiest...lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha is someone blowing their own trumpet lol 😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Well you must not be very good at anatomy otherwise you'd know that is physically impossible ;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're quite right 😛 I failed the subject and had to sit a re exam lol the only subject I failed in my four years 😂

[Tony Jordan]

aww..yumna - now I feel bad for mentioning it ;D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah no I'm over the shock now lol it was my first year and I was naive 😛😂

[Tony Jordan]

Well you are a dentist now so you'll not need to look at the clock while you are poking the fire Dr.
:D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao yeah of course! Failures are what built me up 😊😉😉

[Tony Jordan]

Well some ancient buildings contain the skulls of those who died whilst constructing them so you are following a time-honoured tradition :))
(Dan Browne said that lol)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol where? I have forgotten.. Should be reading again the 'facts' 😉😂

[Tony Jordan]

Don't worry. When your biog is written I'll make sure the author sticks to the facts and keep Dan the hell away. lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahahah it would be good if you yourself wrote it 😛😉

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest journey in the emotion of love my friend.
"I'm left, now...
staring at my empty hands,
which once held those dreams of us
...together"
The above lines. Hard place to find and know. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Coyote! Always appreciate your words 😊😊

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome my friend.

[Larayasha DiAlma]

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. I could feel your emotions while reading through your poem. Beautiful.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for liking. I appreciate your words :)