I feel it! I feel it! The words are flowing gently in my soul and heart... Wait for it... wait for it! BOOM! Now, I can write my review :)
Beautiful... engaging... powerful! It shows how much your loved ones do and can do for you! This poem shows that one person can make such a difference in your life! You portrayed the message very well in this poem! Keep it up! :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
True. and I cherish all my loved ones :)
Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm glad you li.. read moreTrue. and I cherish all my loved ones :)
Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm glad you liked it :)
I like this! I like the way the title comes into the poem but not till the 4th line, and then re-emerges at the start of V3 - very nice continuity and flow. All the rest, a blur! Nice way of showing the focus on the 'you'.
Nice job!
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind comments, Nigel. Really means a lot to me 😊
Gentle and beautiful journey in your words dear friend.
"Your deep blue ocean eyes
made it easier for me to swim and rise...
you held my hand, protecting me
from the cruel world's ravaging waves."
The ravaging sea. A beautiful place to know. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you! Truly appreciate your liking my words 😊😊
Sigh.. I could feel so much love here. Don't tell me it came out of nowhere when it doesn't look like that. The words you wove were beautiful. I so love it. Sweet.
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7 Years Ago
Ahh out of nowhere meant I didn't intend to write in this way. I was trying to write a freestyle poe.. read moreAhh out of nowhere meant I didn't intend to write in this way. I was trying to write a freestyle poem but when I was done this came out :p
I'm so glad you liked it. Truly appreciate your words MP :)
Sighhh!
This definitely did not come "out of nowhere", Yumna!
It danced, flowed, and twirled out from the wondrous beauty of your creative spirit, your imaginative ocean of feelings, thoughts, dreams, and emotions brightly alive and breathing within your heart and core.
Such enthrallment does not appear from nowhere, nor does it disappear once it has emerged; it remains within the minds and hearts of your readers … of mine.
Thank you, Yumna, for sharing this brilliantly composed and presented original work of sheer poetic bliss! ⁓ Richard : )
(your line-breaks, imagery, emotional timbre, and phenomenal syntax are perfection to be studied and passed-on by many … what a sweet, apt picture, too)
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7 Years Ago
Ahh, 'out of nowhere' meant I hadn't intended to write this in the first place. In actual, I was try.. read moreAhh, 'out of nowhere' meant I hadn't intended to write this in the first place. In actual, I was trying to write a freestyle but this came out...
Thank you so much, Richard, in all your appreciations of my works! It really means a lot to me.. 😊 I like the picture too ☺
Now there above is romance. Pure, unadulterated, soft and lace fine. Everything it should be.
It would be a sin to talk about structure and composition in a review of such quality. So I won't.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Ken! You're always kind in all your reviews of my work. I'm glad you liked it 😊😊
You've written something beautifully different, YumnaKay, because your own and very personal emotions have laid themselves open for the world to see. Poets are sensitive folk, they either hide their own sensitivities because they need be kept hidden as treasure often is or.. Or, there's no hiding the power that rips from the heart's floodgates. Which or whatever is the most thrilling of all thrills. Perhaps? Maybe!
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7 Years Ago
I'm smiling here on your words, Emma, because this piece was different in the sense that it's fictio.. read moreI'm smiling here on your words, Emma, because this piece was different in the sense that it's fictional and not my emotions portrayed here ;)
So,it's based on imagination and fantasies (wink), but I'm glad you liked. I appreciate your thoughts as always :)
7 Years Ago
Like everyone else, I can't guess why or what, how or whatever. Writers are born to portray rather .. read moreLike everyone else, I can't guess why or what, how or whatever. Writers are born to portray rather than state.. and you've done that with great flair, YumanKay. (Read somewhere recently that writers can be one of two types of people: liars, idealists or - it depends on what the reader is!!! Made me laugh when I first read it but thinking about it since.. .. .. !)
7 Years Ago
Liars is fine by me ;) It's more the capability of the reader's perceiving ability in my opinion :)
7 Years Ago
Please note that I was reading a somewhat cynical or perhaps, freely expressed, thought by someone .. read morePlease note that I was reading a somewhat cynical or perhaps, freely expressed, thought by someone else, not by me!
7 Years Ago
hahah yeah I know ;) Still like it :) thank you for making me smile, Emma :)
to be with another and yet feel free...that is beautiful...relationships should not confine us...they should comfort us, support us...and let us get lost in them, on our own...no push...flows nicely...
j.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you for your thoughts here, Jacob. I totally agree. I'm glad you liked it 😊