Last Breath of Goodbye

Composed in Free Style...

Last Breath of Goodbye

What was left from before,

powerfully merciless;

like dark, ominous clouds

smothering every semblance

of inner light,

has now returned...

That hellhole of your love 

you cast me into,

every inch of my skin crawled,

left the carmine softness

of my heart charred,

my soul burned!

Our last breath of goodbye

lingers in the air …

waiting,

wishing,

wanting,

for me to accept

not having you by my side.

That flame I kept alive;

those embers,

like hot desert winds ~ dried,

sparking back to life...

leave me no choice, 

except to cast them

...all aside!

Thank you J Todd Underhill for giving this piece a voice

 https://soundcloud.com/user-557255780/coffee-with-underhill-05-01-2017

Author's Note

Yet another learning experience of writing poetry with Richard :)

Reviews

[Mr.Writer]

Breathtaking experience... wow... omg...! This was amazing!

"What was left from before,
powerfully merciless;
like dark, ominous clouds"
Very descriptive and flows well!
Keep it up! :)
Your learning experience with Richard are working very well :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, as of now, they're on hold lol
Thank you for liking this one too. I appreciate your words 😊

[Mr.Writer]

Lol no problem :D

[Surya]

I truly enjoyed your scenic beauty specially the end of it...aside....matters a lot..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True, it does..
Thank you, Surya! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Kesha]

Loved the ending where it all just got casted aside! Nicely written :) I really enjoyed the color of the font too! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yeah isn't it like that in real life too, you get to cast it all aside lol
Thank you for appreciating, Kesha 😊😊

[Kesha]

Yes it is :) you are welcome, as always :)

[Ardra]

That hellhole of your love
you cast me into,
every inch of my skin crawled,
left the carmine softness
of my heart charred,
my soul burned!

Wow u left me breathless ....this one touches my soul and sings to me of the pain.....it's painfully the truth when you let go of someone you hold close to......thanks for sharing this wonderful creation

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree. It's painful indeed. I feel sad that you can relate to this write...
Thank you for liking, Ria 😊

[Ardra]

The pic is beautiful too......it reminds me of the fragments being washed away from soul...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yeah it reminded me of that too...

[Jes' Pi]

Lovely poem..my sould burned too.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Atashusi! I'm glad you liked it 😊