In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned

Composed in Villanelle form

In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned...

'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,

like tingling waves caressing 'gainst my shore.

In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

So lost before, I wanted to be found;

to feel his touch within my very core;

'pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.

Whispers in the wind, swept me off the ground;

and when I looked down, no fear anymore;

in his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

Towards his melody; then I was bound.

Higher and higher I let my heart soar.

'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,

Oh, what sweet dreams, just to have him around!

To fulfill those delights of moments before.

In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

With his soft music, my heart he'll surround,

as there's no one more than him I adore!

'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.

In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

Author's Note

~~ Another one of my learning experiences with Richard ~~ 😊

Reviews

[Tina H.W.]

Wow....is it permitted for me to cry? For this doth truly make me weep! It's gorgeous, Yumna. It's happy, emotional and so true. We've all felt these feeling at some point. Anyone who reads this and doesn't feel their heart heat is surely bereft of a soul.
I loved it! (I'm also a little jealous of your skill with words) ;) :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so much for this awesome review, Tina! I feel I don't deserve such praise..
Oh and did I mention I'm jealous of your story writing skills? 😛 so we're even hahah 😂
Thanks again 😊😊😊😊

[apennylate]

Go you, and go Richard, cause this is awesome... The repeat rhymes and near rhymes... Just make this piece a pleasure to read... Good job, and nicely penned... Keep at the learning process, always best to write outside ones comfort zones...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is fun indeed to learn new things 😊
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this one too 😊😊

[apennylate]

Mhm, from the looks of it... I need to find myself a mentor... Hah

[apennylate]

Seems to have worked for you...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh no I don't think so! You're already more than good 😊

[apennylate]

Aha... I think we can all benefit from teachings, no matter the skill level... In some way, at least... But thank you for the kind words

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well yeah that's a valid point.. 😊
You're welcome 😊😊

[T0TS]

Such a profound beauty in your words...the title alone drew me in...and your poem never disappointed...excellent work.

:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for the appreciation, Tots! Really means a lot to me 😊

[T0TS]

You are most welcome...it was my pleasure, Yumnakay.

[Lydia Shutter]

A gloriously romantic Villanelle. The emotions are real and the imagery is splendid. Great work. lydi**

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this one 😊

[An owl on the moon]

What a wondrous poem, and what a beautiful form. I've never attempted a Villanelle, but how the words seem to flow from you so effortlessly! There is a music to this rhythm, and your song of adoration is pure joy. Brilliant! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Craig. I'm sure when you will attempt this form, it will be beyond compare. 😊
Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊😊

[An owl on the moon]

I appreciate your kindness and encouragement so much, and showing us all another wondrous poetic form. 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh well it's really Richard who introduced me 😊😊

[An owl on the moon]

He seems a good friend and a good teacher too. 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes he is and so are you 😇😇

[Luna]

I see so its "Villanelle" this time. A very nice flow as always Yumna. It's beautiful and it touched me deeply. Nicely done :) Keep writing your heart out

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Luna! I'm glad you liked this effort too! Means a lot to me 😊😊

[Luna]

Your welcome:)

[Kesha]

What a wonderful piece! I liked your villanelle more than my own! Makes me reluctant to post the other one that I have lol. :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah no! Just post it! I'm sure it's a good one 😊
Thank you so much for liking this effort, Kesha! Means a lot to me 😊😊

[Kesha]

Haha okay, possibly later :) And you are welcome!

[Stacy Purvis]

Warm, beautiful Love. I adore this so much. Thank you for sharing!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Anastasia! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[boygene borice]

I love this poem so much. its deep with a beautiful message. :)
Your writings are awlasy superb :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much for the appreciation! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Paul]

So beautifully written! I truly enjoyed reading this from start to finish.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Paul! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece 😊

[Bala Gorthi]

Expressing feelings beautifully following a particular pattern and standard is challenging. I appreciate how you excelled in bringing out those feelings so well.
Another fine piece of writing. Well done Yumnakay!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Bala! It is difficult indeed but I'm glad you found it okay 😊
Your appreciation means a lot to me 😊