Wow....is it permitted for me to cry? For this doth truly make me weep! It's gorgeous, Yumna. It's happy, emotional and so true. We've all felt these feeling at some point. Anyone who reads this and doesn't feel their heart heat is surely bereft of a soul.
I loved it! (I'm also a little jealous of your skill with words) ;) :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Well, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so muc.. read moreWell, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so much for this awesome review, Tina! I feel I don't deserve such praise..
Oh and did I mention I'm jealous of your story writing skills? 😛 so we're even hahah 😂
Thanks again 😊😊😊😊
A heartfelt write that shares dreams and a chained heart. Much emotion to share a tale of longing and a spent soul. Your words let us relive a time in our own lives when we were "all in" in giving our heart to another. Thank you for your honest write.
Richie b.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you for your thoughts on this piece and for liking, Richieb. Truly appreciate it 😊
I'm not a big fan of repeating lines just for the sake of poetic form, so I usually don't like villanelles. In this case, however, your repeated lines do not draw attention & feel like a natural flow of the storyline, so the repetition is not distracting like so many villanelles can be. I love the title which is imaginative & fits well into the repeated lines. Good job with this form!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I'm really glad you liked this one despite your not liking the villanelle form in general.
Th.. read moreI'm really glad you liked this one despite your not liking the villanelle form in general.
Thank you for appreciating, BG. Really means a lot to me 😊
Forms can be difficult as they can be so rigid in structure that the content suffers. However, your content is lovely, the form is wonderful and the flow of your words are divine. You nailed this one. Beautiful writing! :) Julie
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you. That's a great compliment for me. I agree, forms aren't easy to manage.. Glad you liked t.. read moreThank you. That's a great compliment for me. I agree, forms aren't easy to manage.. Glad you liked this one :)
Wow....is it permitted for me to cry? For this doth truly make me weep! It's gorgeous, Yumna. It's happy, emotional and so true. We've all felt these feeling at some point. Anyone who reads this and doesn't feel their heart heat is surely bereft of a soul.
I loved it! (I'm also a little jealous of your skill with words) ;) :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Well, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so muc.. read moreWell, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so much for this awesome review, Tina! I feel I don't deserve such praise..
Oh and did I mention I'm jealous of your story writing skills? 😛 so we're even hahah 😂
Thanks again 😊😊😊😊
Yes, it is fun indeed.. Thank you for liking. I appreciate your words 😊
7 Years Ago
I wrote a Villanelle called "The Unveiling" If you get a chance, I'd love for you to read it!
7 Years Ago
Talented AND modest! Seriously, Yumna, you have a gift and I'm glad you're sharing it :)
Oh a.. read moreTalented AND modest! Seriously, Yumna, you have a gift and I'm glad you're sharing it :)
Oh and, er, thank you so much too!!! :)
You really have given yourself over to this poem and it shows in the depth and eloquence that comes surely from the heart's ink drops.
I love Vanilla - 'ell I love all flavors of ice-scream
You can keep this up Yumna - plz.
:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, TJ! I'm glad you liked it 😊
You have the knack of breaking my heart by.. read moreThank you so much, TJ! I'm glad you liked it 😊
You have the knack of breaking my heart by the "ice-scream" thing 😂
I love all flavours too 😉 will be sure to let you eat when you come for extractions 😂😂😂