Realization

Composed in Free Verse..

Realization

Not a moment too soon

or a moment too late,

as if the night spoke

whispering softly,

and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,

how the last shred of hope 

I was hanging by

was merely

a glimmer, a spark, 

keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing

Luna would cast her spell,

and you'll fall back

into the cocoon of my arms;

that stars

would sprinkle their dust,

lighting a pathway to

relive our moments.

This,

and, maybe, it's a fact

you're not as gone

as I think;

that you'll appear

within the span of

a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,

hoping it was not to be

that I'd find an eternal distance

between us,

that even if I want you

a gap would remain

uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,

thin as where

air and water meet,

here, where I am ...

choking back tears 

in this moment's realization

that you've finally gone,

not even looking back,

never to return....!

Author's Note

So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

Reviews

[Mary]

Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
Thank you for your kind words, Mary. I appreciate it 😊

[Bala Gorthi]

The style, presentation, flow and feel, all are there in this craft. The title is justified. This is the best of your writes I have read so far.
Very well done. Thank you for sharing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Wow, thank you for such a great compliment! I'm really glad you liked this one, Bala! Means a lot to me 😊

[MsJewel]

It took me a long time to be able to write freeverse. I found syllable count and rhyme much easier. You nailed this one - I can't believe it is your first. The rhythm is wonderful, the content lovely - I love the firefly's wink (I wish I had written that). Simply beautiful. :) Julie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh I can not take credit for the 'firefly's wink', it was Richard's idea 😉
Thank you so much for the appreciation, Julie! Even I didn't know I could write at first but I'm glad you found it okay 😊

[Tony Jordan]

I would have to agree with your mentor and say that you were the owner of a deeply metaphorical free verse pen before your tutelage under him Yumna. I remember a fine metaphorical free verse titled 'Glassless windows.'
Well done here - again.
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh those were mere words. I didn't see any metaphorical sense in that but thank you for the generous comment, Tony! You're always kind in all your appreciations 😊
I'm glad you liked this one 😊

[Tony Jordan]

mere words...lol
mmm...
okay

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol don't smirk at me 😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

me - smirk...I don't have the facilities to smirk - Im an onion remember - lmao
(how the feck did she know I was smirking...)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahahaha facilities? Abilities? Capabilities? What lol 😛😂😂😂
You were! I know you top to bottom hahaha 😂😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

okay then - utilities haha...
*note to self - stop letting people get so close *
lol
;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao *note to self - stop people from smirking at you 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

*note to shelf - hold more books*
lmao

[Dr. YumnaKay]

*note to self - throw all the books on this guy's head 😂😂😂
I could go on and on you know I'll win 😛😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

*note to self - work on stamina*
*waves white flag....

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You should work on ducking more 😂
So early! I didn't expect you to be a chicken lmao JK 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

duck and chicken ? Make up your mind. I cry fowl. lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol I thought you'd waved the white flag? 😂😂 clearly down too soon 😛😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

I had but you pushed me too far - like Marty McFly - nobody calls me chicken !! grr...

;p

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Well someone had to.. So I did 😂😂😂

[Tony Jordan]

Well like Marty McFly I'm gonna go back to the past and call you chicken first - that way you'll look lame by just copying me and calling me chicken in the future which is just past...
;pp

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lmao I had to read this 3 times to understand what you said 😂😂😂
In that case I would say take a time machine lol 😉😛😂

[Tony Jordan]

3 times !?!
Ah well you got there in the end...or was it at the start...ugh ..now I'm confused ...lol

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Lol lol now you've confused me 👊😂

[Michael G. Smith]

My favorite so far. I do feel a progression in your writing as I read this beautifully crafted piece. It such a natural flow like a power river around a bend slows to control. The conveyance of a troubled heart in the yearning to understanding comes through in the well thought analogies.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would give more credit to Richard than myself in the progression of my writing as you call it 😊
I'm really glad you liked this one too, Michael! Thank you so much 😊

[Kesha]

I really like this piece! You convey the agony perfectly! I also really enjoy the color of the font, it gave it a soft undertone, nicely done friend!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Kesha, thank you so much! I'm actually liking this whole session of learning to layout my words in the right sense 😊
The colour theme was Richard's idea 😉
I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Kesha]

Thats awesome! I just finished a new piece :) about to post it!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Looking forward to reading it 😊

[Kesha]

Thanks :) posted ;) it's alright :P

[Richard🖌]

Yumna,
I cannot tell you how pleased I am to be credited with your first Free Verse, but I must decline the honor, M'Dear, as most all of your pieces are written in the Free Verse style, and all I've really done is give a hand with structure, grammar, and a sprinkling of metaphor.
To compose excellent Free Verse (or any form of poetry) one has to possess adequate potential, creative imagination, and heart, which you're filled to overflowing with it.
This is why you'll accomplish anything poetical you set your mind to.
Take this beautifully-rendered, magical work of romantically tender, poignancy … it virtually oozes with heart-gripping, mind's-eye, enchantment, that sweeps and holds the reader captive in its aura from first to last word, and the presentation and picture selection set the perfect mood to wrap us up with you in your wistful tale of melancholy, as fine poetry's always prone to do.
You can't blame me for this … LOL!

To have had any part in being there to assist you is pleasure beyond and above the gorgeous poem dancing upon this page before me … thank you, Yumna, for blessing an humble bard in such a graciously rewarding manner! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Richard, my pieces may have been in free verse but not in the metaphorical sense. But this one here was made so by your help to which I can not but not give you credit. 😉
I warmly thank you for trying so skillfully to bring out something in me which I hadn't known I had the potential to lol 😛
I'm really glad you liked this piece. 😊

[Richard🖌]

It is my deepest joy and honor to serve … thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, Yumna! : )

[Jes' Pi]

I really like your poem...and free verse is very good.
Cute painting :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Atashusi! I'm glad you liked it :)
I didn't paint it lol ;P