Realization

Composed in Free Verse..

Realization

Not a moment too soon

or a moment too late,

as if the night spoke

whispering softly,

and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,

how the last shred of hope 

I was hanging by

was merely

a glimmer, a spark, 

keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing

Luna would cast her spell,

and you'll fall back

into the cocoon of my arms;

that stars

would sprinkle their dust,

lighting a pathway to

relive our moments.

This,

and, maybe, it's a fact

you're not as gone

as I think;

that you'll appear

within the span of

a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,

hoping it was not to be

that I'd find an eternal distance

between us,

that even if I want you

a gap would remain

uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,

thin as where

air and water meet,

here, where I am ...

choking back tears 

in this moment's realization

that you've finally gone,

not even looking back,

never to return....!

Author's Note

So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

Reviews

[Mary]

Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
Thank you for your kind words, Mary. I appreciate it 😊

[Lovecraft]

I adore Free-Verse poetry. ;)

I like the reference to the moon in its Latin form, Luna. It's beautifully sad, the imagery capturing that "Hopeful Sadness" in an evocative and delightful way. I like the image you chose for this poem, quite appropriate.

Overall, very well done, Kay! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Lovecraft! I like free verse too 😉 I'm glad you liked this one 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Realizations mostly leave us in deep thoughts and sadness. Beautifully expressed yourself I liked it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're right, they do..
Thank you for your thoughts, Najam! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[Giulia King]

I love this poem, Yumna!! I love the picture too. This is amazing! It feels like we're reading from a whole new Yumna :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Gullia, thank you so much! You're always kind in your appreciations of my work 😊
It's like I'm discovering myself lol
I like the picture too 😉

[Ardra]

mmmm so hauntingly beautiful yumna...

Yet, my breath's shallow,
thin as where
air and water meet,
here, where I am ...
choking back tears
in this moment's realization
that you've finally gone,
not even looking back,
never to return....!

you have captured the feeling of being breathless in these above lines...
i could read it again and again and still feel there is lot more to it...
felt each of these lines spoke to me..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Ria! There could be. For after realization, there comes the survival phase..
I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Ardra]

mmmm the realization...the survival..
i feel i am stuck in a roller coster ride of emotions always...

i also loved the line which said
Luna would cast her spell,
and you'll fall back
into the cocoon of my arms;

you write very beautifully...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm I think it's more of a fluctuation between the two...
Thank you so much! That's sweet of you to say 😊

[Ardra]

hehe i guess you will understand me more...
ya from one to another kind of emotional loop :P

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahem yes you can say that 😉

[Ardra]

i dint meant to suggest anything else :)
just that we share the same emotional roller coaster ride most of the time with the tidal changes.. thats why :)
others wont understand this madness..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Oh I know what you meant lol I agree to that 😉 don't worry we're all a bit mad hahahaha😂😂

[Ken Simm.]

This is a thought that continues as you walk through it towards a peaceful longing place perhaps. Extremely well written. I am reminded of water flowing downwards as I read this. It is so often what thoughts can feel like. I enjoyed reading it immensely.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting comparison! Thank you for your thoughts here. Truly appreciate it 😊

[Surya]

It's beautiful, well penned....sadness occupied by realised happiness....
I liked it...:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Quite a summary! Thank you for your appreciation, Surya! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Poeticme]

This is truly a lovely piece of writing my lady, " A firefly's wink.... Genius!!!. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write

Poeticme

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Poeticme! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[richieb]

Your free verse is beautiful. This poem is very well written. You can hear and feel the fear and sadness in your writing. This is excellent writing, it flows lightly, giving the reader hope and coming to the the fateful conclusion that all is lost.
Thank you for your fine poetry.
Many Blessings,
Richie b.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your beautiful thoughts and appreciation, Richieb! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Sasha]

Flow is beautiful. Very nicely penned. Thanks for sharing :-D

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Sasha! I appreciate your words 😊

[aLittlePain]

This is quite lovely. The font image and even the font colour add an ambience to it. Very nicely done. R xo

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Ray! I'm glad you liked it. Much humbled by your appreciation :)