Realization

Composed in Free Verse..

Realization

Not a moment too soon

or a moment too late,

as if the night spoke

whispering softly,

and I finally realized …

what I should have all along,

how the last shred of hope 

I was hanging by

was merely

a glimmer, a spark, 

keeping me alive.

I went as far as believing

Luna would cast her spell,

and you'll fall back

into the cocoon of my arms;

that stars

would sprinkle their dust,

lighting a pathway to

relive our moments.

This,

and, maybe, it's a fact

you're not as gone

as I think;

that you'll appear

within the span of

a firefly's wink.

As I breathed,

hoping it was not to be

that I'd find an eternal distance

between us,

that even if I want you

a gap would remain

uncovered.

Yet, my breath's shallow,

thin as where

air and water meet,

here, where I am ...

choking back tears 

in this moment's realization

that you've finally gone,

not even looking back,

never to return....!

Author's Note

So, this is probably the first piece I wrote in Free Verse which Richard taught me :)

Reviews

[Mary]

Luna does cast her spell at times, but her light also exposes reality. That moment of realization, and acceptance of the truth is heartbreakingly sung in these beautiful words. Excellent flow throughout the poem, like a sigh of resignation. We all have that one unforgettable love in our lives, often it is lost. And it sometimes takes a lifetime to accept it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, so true. I feel it's really like a relapse. You realize it but still want to go back..
Thank you for your kind words, Mary. I appreciate it 😊

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Yumna, you write with such emotion :) very heartfelt. There is pain in coming to realize such things and humility in acceptance. The words are so soft like whispers woven like lace. Really lovely work Yumna. Izzy

[Dr. YumnaKay]

There is indeed. I think that realization gives us strength in the long run..
Thank you, Izzy, for your words here and for appreciating. Means a lot :))

[Island Hippy]

You're welcome

[Ava gray]

its great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you :))

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

And there is another beautiful poem. Im happy to have read this. It is something when one you care for leaves, but there are so many roads open for others. You never know what you go into

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True, I agree.
Thank you for liking and sharing your insight here, Sir Drift. Means a lot 😊

[Farhan Shaikh]

Beautiful pie e of poetry, I loved it and well penned.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Farhan. Glad you liked it :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Your welcome😊

[apennylate]

Oh gosh, this is quite up my alley of interest... You have free verse down pat, my friend... Luna and firefly can kiss me goodnight as I close the page on this beautiful poetry... Very well penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Silente! I'm glad this kept your interest! Means a lot to me 😊

[apennylate]

Of course.

[William Liston]

Wow ... a beautiful piece of poetry with an enthralling visual presentation to match. My favorite aspect of this poem had to be its delicacy in that every word feels soft yet poignant. The imagery feels light and feathery, which (to me) provides a good contrast with the poem's melancholic theme. Also, I can't tell you how much I love the lines "thin as where air and water meet" ... they're so soft and simple yet amazingly beautiful, almost like a soft rain or a cool breeze.

As for critiques, I have a quibble with the third line of the third stanza: "and you'll fall back." In my mind, it makes more sense for "you'll" to be "you'd" because the rest of the poem is in past tense ~ that, and the speaker seems not to hold that belief anymore.

- William Liston

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for this amazing review, William. I'm glad you liked the imagery in this one.
As for the critics, well.. It's written in the present form with just a touch of past reflections. I don't think 'you'll' makes any difference..
I appreciate your comments. Means a lot to me 😊

[BBP]

You evoke emotion so well Yumna. Graceful and blunt. Always a pleasure.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Bev! I'm glad the emotions hit you here 😉😊

[Paul]

Very well written. And described so eloquently. Thanks for sharing this poem!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Paul! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[CAPOLAVORO]

This is a good free verse. You could do more beautiful poems I believe so. Keep writing.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I've been experimenting on what I can do better so I'll definitely be working on that. I appreciate your words 😊

[CAPOLAVORO]

You are very much welcome.