I let my warm imagination spring, "Oh my, how your caress sets me aglow!" Let's listen to what unsung songs will bring; then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know.
I let you take me in your warm embrace, with all your love upon me please bestow! I wonder why I gift you my sweet grace? Then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know.
I let myself to you be swept away, my eyes filled by the wonderment you show! Around 'n round within your arms, I sway; then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know.
I let you reach the depths of my cold heart, whence you turn hardened glaciers to soft snow. And, now no one can e’er pull us apart! Then, as you wash me with your words, "I'll know!"
It is a most enthralling composition, Yumna! : )
With beautiful picture, apt font and color, creative word selections, romantic ambiance, spot-on rhymes, and a flow smooth as warm honey, your lovely mind, heart, and soul have shared a masterpiece of true poetic excellence to make one's imagination virtually melt.
Every verse sings, and your refrain, "Then, as you wash me with your words, I'll know" tied it all together in an embracing bow of romantic promise.
What a pleasure it has been to work with you in learning and writing this excellent piece, Yumna … thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully for your trust in me, and the honor of teaching you your first Kyrielle … you are an amazing poetess! ⁓ Richard ✨
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Richard, it wouldn't have been possible without you waiting so patiently for me to grasp how it real.. read moreRichard, it wouldn't have been possible without you waiting so patiently for me to grasp how it really is done.
Thank you for the extremely kind words of appreciation. It was an amazing experience to learn from you the true art of poetry. I hope for more to come 😊
This is beautiful my lady, such a gorgeous rhyme and flow...It sung to me!!...Almost so it took me away and I read off the page!!...Lol!!...Thank you for sharing the beautiful poet inside your lovely soul......,,no need to worry about such silly things as meters and all that other technical mess, poetry such as this comes how it comes, From the heart, Never the Lips
Poeticme
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I was trying to do something different including meters as this was the first time for me to write .. read moreI was trying to do something different including meters as this was the first time for me to write in a particular form..
I'm glad you like it. Thank you for the appreciation! It means a lot to me 😊
This is very impressive. I don't think I've ever read a rhyming poem by you (maybe one) and to see you step out of your comfort zone and write something like this is truly amazing. It shows a lot of skill with its spot-on meter and smoothly flowing rhymes. I also love the soft feel of this piece in that every line feels warm and romantic ... fits the refrain quite well. I especially liked the last stanza with the "hardened glaciers" and "soft snow" analogies.
I must also say that the Kyrielle is my favorite form. I like to write them when I want to release emotion. The majority of them, however, don't make any sense.
- William Liston
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I may have written rhyming poems but without maintaining the meter and everything. This was a truly .. read moreI may have written rhyming poems but without maintaining the meter and everything. This was a truly wonderful experience for me as well but I was unsure if I could.
Thank you so much for your appreciation of my efforts, William! It really means a lot 😊
Your poem has a delicate flow that speaks of gentle persuasion. Trying something new is healthy and a confidence builder. You have learned the Kyrielle form well.
I enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more of your work.
Richie b.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I agree, it is a confidence builder. I'm glad I found a good teacher like Richard to teach me 😊 <.. read moreI agree, it is a confidence builder. I'm glad I found a good teacher like Richard to teach me 😊
Thank you for your thoughts and for the appreciation, Richieb! I'm glad you liked it 😊
I love this! It feels like a new Yumna! Your words have more depth now :)
Richard taught you well.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much! It felt good to do something new lol
Yes he's a really good teacher! I'm s.. read moreThank you so much! It felt good to do something new lol
Yes he's a really good teacher! I'm so glad you liked the depth here, Gullia 😊
I love the form, your words and the beautiful feeling I'm left with after reading it. It is lovely and sounds so wonderful read out loud. Absolutely stunning. :) Julie
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much! It was more effort on Richard's part who taught how to do this properly. I'm glad.. read moreThank you so much! It was more effort on Richard's part who taught how to do this properly. I'm glad you liked it 😊
I mean wow ...this was so beautiful yumna.... wash me with your words...Mmmm loved every bit of it....
And that's the most sensual thing a person can do to u wash us with their words Hehe ;) nice pic to go along
I think so too 😉
Thank you for your beautiful thoughts here, Ria! I'm glad you liked it �.. read moreI think so too 😉
Thank you for your beautiful thoughts here, Ria! I'm glad you liked it 😊
You painted a wonderful image through your words, Yumna. This has that poetic depth and quality in it. All verses are equally lovely.
A soothing and enchanting piece on love I say. Trying different forms of poetry is really fun and I am glad that you are experiencing that. A successful attempt in writing this form. Beautiful language, Yumna :-)
Keep up the good Work.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Gorthi! It was fun writing this down. I'm glad you enjoyed it and that the depth of the w.. read moreThank you, Gorthi! It was fun writing this down. I'm glad you enjoyed it and that the depth of the words touched you as well. 😊
This is beautiful, your first try but it was more than good...
"I let you reach the depths of my cold heart,
whence you turn hardened glaciers to soft snow.
And, now no one can e’er pull us apart!
Then, as you wash me with your words, "I'll know!"...these contains bag of emotions...
I liked the way you described your poem...
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you, Surya! I'm glad my first attempt touched you. 😊
I liked this poem dear friend.
"And, now no one can e’er pull us apart!
Then, as you wash me with your words, "I'll know!"
The above lines. Solid and wonderful. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Coyote, thank you so much! Your words mean a lot to me 😊
You totally washed me with your words :p..
Beautiful!
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8 Years Ago
Hahah thank you so much, Atashusi! I'm glad you liked it and hope that you were thoroughly washed �.. read moreHahah thank you so much, Atashusi! I'm glad you liked it and hope that you were thoroughly washed 😉😛