Doesn't Feel Like Love

you claim your love, 

it's you who stole my heart

yet it doesn't 

feel like love.

you breathe in my breaths, 

it's you that I inhale, exhale 

yet it doesn't 

feel like love.

you dance in my dreams,

it's you in my subconscious mind

yet it doesn't

feel like love.

it doesn't...

it doesn't 

feel

like love.. 

Author's Note

Boredom strikes again...

Reviews

[Nigel Newman]

Hi Yumna. You've been kind enough to comment on some of my work, so I thought I'd return the favour. I looked at several of your more recent ones, but it was this one that I homed in on. Why? I think I find it more accessible. I like the repeats, and the phrases feel real. It's quite short and of course somewhat sad, but it holds together pretty well.

KRs
Nigel

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms.. read moreHi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms..
I'm glad this hit home with you. Thank you for liking 😊

[Poeticme]

What a touching piece, I hope it was fictional?. But it felt as if you were speaking from truth....A beautiful write nevertheless​...*smiles*

Poeticme

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This was fictional 😉 just an observation on my part.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[TeeJae {TJ} Hart]

Love can be difficult to define our mind may think it one thing yet our heart still feels empty and incomplete

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, I quite agree. Thank you for adding your thoughts here. I appreciate it 😊

[V]

The ones who stole our heart and mind in such a selfish way, it only leaves you suffering or feel drained. Drawn of emotion and soberness or even near indifference kicks in..that's what I take from it..
This has a lyrical like character.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree. Thank you for your thoughts here, V! I appreciate it :)

[V]

Very welcome, Yumna :)

[Writing Angel]

well I guess what is the feeling of love?... is it the happiness that someone understand you or the pain that you feel when they no longer want you.... however beautifully done

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think love is realizing that they can be happy without you and letting them go..
Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts here and for liking 😊

[Writing Angel]

thank you for putting it out there it was an amazing read

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm much humbled, WA 😊

[apennylate]

Feels more like obsession-fueled lust... Sounds, rather, like a hollow chase with no palpable dividend gained... As that is what this type of feeling is, to me at least... A sum of monetary exchange... Emptily penned...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree with your last statement. It was emptily penned. Thank you for your thoughts here. Appreciate it 😊

[apennylate]

Oh... I meant that in a good way... But you are welcome... Erhm, if I might add... You are a clever and soulful writer... Constantly creating "negative" energy, even if it is just harmless self criticism... Can be quite the deteriorating pastime to partake in... Otherwise I respect your view on your work... Just a thought from someone who is quite excellent at self deprecation, themselves... Heh

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I did take it in a good way, Silente 😛
I think anyone write when they're really feeling an emotion but to write it off when you don't feel it is what makes it interesting to me. If that makes sense 😛
I think I've told you before, I find your work excellent. There was this piece which I understood enough to review too, but being lazy I forgot. My apologies 😛
And thank you for the compliments 😊

[apennylate]

Whew, that is a relief, did not intend "emptily" as a derogatory term... Thanks for understanding... You have mentioned that before, and I am not really not looking for reviews or popularity... Just a place to post my writing... I am pleased with the community here, though, I will say that... As long as you read something, and take anything away from it, I am happy. You are welcome, and yes... It does make sense. I am unfortunately guided by my muse to a default... I can not really breach the current emotional status to bring about new writing... I should work on that, heh...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I work by the same principle. Popularity is somewhat childish to wish for lol
You must have met good people here if you hold that opinion although I too agree about that general speaking 😛
Everyone has their own ideas to work on. It's interesting to read and gain as much as we can 😊

[apennylate]

I am glad to hear it, and yes... Children abound when things like "popularity" are brought to bear... I have been met with an overall pleasant vibe, that is for sure... Aye, that we do... Anywhere and anything I can, haha...

[Ardra]

mmmm i like the flow of the poem yumna... even in boredom you have woven a beautiful one..

hehe sometimes i keep telling myself these lines...
it doesn't feel like love...
it doesn't feel like love..
still it is still love...as it hurts quiet deep
but what about the other end
i wonder again
it still doesn't feel like love.. :)

i liked the lady in the pic :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Love seems a foreign experience to me. Something which I still have to get the full blast of..
Thank you for your thoughts and for the beautiful words, Ria! It means a lot to me 😊
P.S. your last statement is a dangerous one iykwim 😂😂😂

[Ardra]

haha :P she looks ready for whats coming her way very confident..

mmm good luck with love...
its always better to have tasted it than to have never known it.. heart breaks are always part of it... but there there is no gain without some pain ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah yeah sort of. And I agree somewhat 😉

[Ardra]

hehe i seem to get only that in life so thats why i said so :)
hope u will find better ones who keeps u happy my friend

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I wish the same for you too 😊

[Jibey]

Even feelings ca get tired and stale... so that we go through the motions of love without feeling the essence... Sad, but true to life...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts here, Jibey. I agree. Sometimes love fool our minds..
I corrected it 😛

[Najam Us Saher]

This poem shows the state of mind and heart. You feel like it is not love. But the things you feel and the things that cross your mind makes you feel that you are in love. However I feel that this is a very true poem which shows the confused state of mind you have beautifully written it. ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This was sprouted from a bored mind although yes it does depict confusion but not on my part, just a general observation. I was merely playing around with words. Something which I usually do in my pieces lol
Thank you for your kind words and appreciation, Najam! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

:) You're always welcome.