Hi Yumna. You've been kind enough to comment on some of my work, so I thought I'd return the favour. I looked at several of your more recent ones, but it was this one that I homed in on. Why? I think I find it more accessible. I like the repeats, and the phrases feel real. It's quite short and of course somewhat sad, but it holds together pretty well.
KRs
Nigel
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Hi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms.. read moreHi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms..
I'm glad this hit home with you. Thank you for liking 😊
Wow, I really see where your potential comes from, Poetry is natural, so natural even boredom submits to it :)
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7 Years Ago
Hmm I feel it comes more natural to me when I'm bored as compared to when I really want to write �.. read moreHmm I feel it comes more natural to me when I'm bored as compared to when I really want to write 😉
Thank you for appreciating, Sire. Means a lot 😊
Hi Yumna. You've been kind enough to comment on some of my work, so I thought I'd return the favour. I looked at several of your more recent ones, but it was this one that I homed in on. Why? I think I find it more accessible. I like the repeats, and the phrases feel real. It's quite short and of course somewhat sad, but it holds together pretty well.
KRs
Nigel
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Hi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms.. read moreHi, Nigel! This is probably the last piece I wrote before I indulged in learning poetical forms..
I'm glad this hit home with you. Thank you for liking 😊
Love, I understand comes in a package which does not always feel roses and sunshine. May be that is the time we do some homework I guess. Yumna, spot on with your ideas again. Loved it.
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7 Years Ago
I agree! It's a complex phenomenon. Something which needs more time but we're prone to rush..
.. read moreI agree! It's a complex phenomenon. Something which needs more time but we're prone to rush..
Thank you so much, Queen! I'm glad you liked this one. Truly appreciate it 😊
Being comfortable with another and loving that "other" are not necessarily the same. Hot passion and romance and love are also two different things. It becomes tricky to discern sometimes. Love and being in love, that is the question. Well written poem that leave the question unanswered- most excellent!
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7 Years Ago
I quite agree! Thankfully I have yet to fall in love to discern it 😉
Thank you so much fo.. read moreI quite agree! Thankfully I have yet to fall in love to discern it 😉
Thank you so much for liking and for your thoughts, Mary! Truly appreciate it 😊
Love, confusion, boredom all seems to be a family.
They strike us all at once and damage us.
But still we all thrive for it. That's love.:) Very good writing :)
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7 Years Ago
That's an amazing summary! Thank you so much for your thoughts and for liking, Manasa 😊
Hmmm If you're having these thoughts about something it's best to leave before someone gets hurt badly. On the poem though, I really liked the humdrum feelings and the boredom of being stuck in a relationship you no longer vie for. Nicely written :) as always ;)
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7 Years Ago
Lol this was written in my times of boredom.. It's nothing too serious for me, I was merely playing .. read moreLol this was written in my times of boredom.. It's nothing too serious for me, I was merely playing around with words 😛
But thank you for your thoughts here and for liking! I truly appreciate it 😊
Like a lot of things love isn't like what it used to be. So many refer to the older days as examples of love rather than this modern mundane world. You poem was well is expressed, filled with feeling. Tyfs!
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7 Years Ago
I agree. Love is a vast emotion which we easily twist...
Thank you for liking and sharing you.. read moreI agree. Love is a vast emotion which we easily twist...
Thank you for liking and sharing your thoughts here. I appreciate it 😊
Haha, truly a confused state.....i say stop talking to someone for days if you feel the same then its something or else just leave it......
Your confused poem did shown exact feelings of a confused person.....
I liked it...:)
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7 Years Ago
Thank you! Fortunately that confused person ain't me ;) This was just me playing around with words :.. read moreThank you! Fortunately that confused person ain't me ;) This was just me playing around with words :p
I'm glad you liked it :)
Nicely written. A lot of people are confused about their feelings, mind says one thing and heart says the opposite. I loved the way you put that perspective into this poem. Love seems too complicated here..very nicely done YumnaKay 😃
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7 Years Ago
I agree it is..
Thank you, Michael, for your thoughts and the appreciation! It means a lot �.. read moreI agree it is..
Thank you, Michael, for your thoughts and the appreciation! It means a lot 😊