I like looking up at the moon, thinking it smiles back.
Sometimes, I think it does; whereas, other times, it's as if it disappears from the face of a darkening sky, and those are the nights I frantically keep searching for it to appear, for it to watch over me, because, somehow, I've made myself believe it copies me … that it knows and understands whatever mood I'm in.
Also, I like looking up at the clouds forming shapes, engulfing stars, and occasionally the moon, which makes the sky take on the appearance of how my life feels right now: empty, foreboding, overwhelming darkness everywhere, while I seek a way out to embrace breath-gifting, ached for light.
Yet, it seems as though the darkness has penetrated my very mind, causing me to look at the bleak view from a dimly lit window of my soul, where something resides... sleeping, waiting to be awakened....!
You are the first person in my life that expresses this feeling that my moods are mirrored in the phases of the moon! It's like, with a brand new crescent, life seems to have new promise & with a waning crescent, life feels as if it's slipping thru our fingers. I love hearing the details of how this feels from your perspective & your expressions are artful & relatable (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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Ahh, I feel glad to know that you could relate to my words, BG. Always a nice feeling :)
As .. read moreAhh, I feel glad to know that you could relate to my words, BG. Always a nice feeling :)
As a moonchild, I think our lives just revolve around or in regards with the moon. I love the thought somehow.
Thank you so much for your lovely words. Hugs back 💜
I love this little story of your inner feelings Yumna. From this writing I can tell that you are more awake than you think you are. There is some mysterious connection between the night skies and soul searchers I believe. Enjoyed it very much.
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Sometimes, it's an in-between feeling of being dead and awake at the same time, Queen and maybe in t.. read moreSometimes, it's an in-between feeling of being dead and awake at the same time, Queen and maybe in that moment was when I wrote this.
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you so much 😊😊
To be honest, I'd been craving to read something like this. I'd been searching my feed to find something that holds the essence of nature and sadness, coming together. I feel fulfilled now. I'm glad you wrote it.
Looking forward to more of it!
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, I'm glad you found what you were looking for in this piece! 😊😊
P.S seek and.. read moreThank you, I'm glad you found what you were looking for in this piece! 😊😊
P.S seek and ye shall find. Good pieces don't appear in feeds 😉
Moon, the symbol of mood. It reflects us in every manner. Darkness, he may not be fond of yet he comes with it bcoz he loves to lit those who are in dark.
I hope you will find your way out through the dimly lit window.
Nice writing. Well done:)
Yes, I agree with your thoughts.
I hope so too. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and the .. read moreYes, I agree with your thoughts.
I hope so too. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and the appreciation. It means a lot to me 😊
You know, Yumna?
It is rare I will read a story … rarer, still, to review and critique one; however, this wispily spun tale of yours has that certain something that speaks to me in poignant ways, and into even deeper places seldom touched; though, much of your work does that to my senses.
As a lonely person, often sad, I can connect in easy rapport with the essence of your excellently-rendered words, Yumna … so, could be, I'm not so alone after all, eh?
As much as I adored the emotional timbre and ethereal feel you've so skillfully scribed this by, the teacher part of me spots issues (if addressed) might lend it even more palpable appeal … let me know if you'd like my input.
Whatever … LOL! You can tell, I am sure, I'm rather smitten by this one, as Lady Moon, like the restless sea, lures me upward toward her softly-glowing mystery.
Goodness, Yumna!
You sure inspire me to run-on … for which, I most warmly and gratefully thank you! ⁓ Richard : )
Richard, I'm sure there are a lot of errors in this write. I would surely want you to tell me becaus.. read moreRichard, I'm sure there are a lot of errors in this write. I would surely want you to tell me because this piece is more close to my heart than the others I have written.
Thank you for the appreciation. I'm flattered that you're smitten by my words lol 😛
7 Years Ago
Well, Yumna,
I wouldn't go so fas as to say "errors", but mild issues that might be addressed.. read moreWell, Yumna,
I wouldn't go so fas as to say "errors", but mild issues that might be addressed in such a way it will add a special polishing that often produces that finely finished luster, let's say.
I hope the rest of my review came through as clearly as the offer of critique seemed to … LOL!
I really dearly loved and related to this.
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Yes, it did came out well 😊 I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels this way about lonely nights .. read moreYes, it did came out well 😊 I'm glad I'm not the only one who feels this way about lonely nights and the moon. It certainly attracts many...
As evidenced by the untold poems and stories about Lady Luna, I must agree with you, Yumna, that she.. read moreAs evidenced by the untold poems and stories about Lady Luna, I must agree with you, Yumna, that she, indeed, attracts many.
A note: In your last story line above, as this site doesn't seem to allow an m-dash, replacing it instead with a single quote mark, you might consider a semicolon here:
"where something resides; sleeping, waiting to be awakened....!"
(or, an ellipsis)
"where something resides … sleeping, waiting to be awakened....!"
Just sayin'! : )
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Thank you for the honorable mention, too, Yumna! 😔
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Oh yes, I changed it :P
And the pleasure was mine, Richard :)
WOW!!.....Ok I know I have said if already!!...Lol!!. But this is beautiful my lady, I love the simplicity of the grammar...A style such as my own...Thanks for sharing this lovely write. You may enjoy my poem From the Heart, Never the Lips...Thanks again my lady
A beautiful poem about the night sky. There's something magical about the moon :)
Loved reading this, Yumna. Somehow this piece felt different. I felt more depth in this piece. Like you actually love the moon. Can't really explain it. But this is one of your best pieces :)
I actually do love the moon more than the stars 😉
I think I've put more thought in this p.. read moreI actually do love the moon more than the stars 😉
I think I've put more thought in this piece than in the others 😛
Thank you for your beautiful thoughts, Gullia! I'm really glad you like it 😊
Sounds like me. I grew fond of the darkness, I'm glad to hear that I'm not the only one seeking comfort in the moon and relying on the skies. Laying my mood and gloominess on the night for it resembles me. It fills me, it pretends to give answers to what boils inside of me...those nights I believe the answers are in the stars, on how to enlighten me, but as I like to quote" The fault, [dear Brutus] is not in our stars, but in ourselves [...]"
Reminded me of it. I love this story. Thank you for sharing a part of myself, I dare to say. ❤
I tend to disagree with the quoted statement because I think its' not in us that the fault lies, it'.. read moreI tend to disagree with the quoted statement because I think its' not in us that the fault lies, it's really the situations, stars, karma whatever you call it that has the faults..
More than the stars, it's the moon that attracts me most. It's a strange liking.
I'm glad I'm not the only one too ;)
Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts here, Vanessa. I'm glad you found yourself in this one :)
I have an odd and strong connection with the moon too, constan.. read moreMy pleasure. I did. :)
I have an odd and strong connection with the moon too, constantly looking for it in the nightly sky. Some people may think I'm crazy; a lunatic lol, that's where the word derives from. Haha.
I respect your opposing opinion. To each his own ;) I'm in a constant conflict with my belief or want to believe in karma, fate etc. and the rational part of me..
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I think you told me to embrace the fact that we're all weird somehow, didn't you? ;) Being a "Luna-t.. read moreI think you told me to embrace the fact that we're all weird somehow, didn't you? ;) Being a "Luna-tic" is good :p
I respect yours :)
The moon, oh that wonderful moon.. can conjure up so many emotions. Am a 'cancerian' too, every night, without fail before turning off lights, I peer up to see what I know is up there somewhere, perhaps peeping down at Humankind from within clouded space.
Your words flow so beautifully, you create pictures from your emotions, Perhaps it's best to always remember that without the moon and sun, we'd not exist but we do, we do.. So, whatever, hold onto that and be patient.. and think of each dawn as being rebirth.
Exquisite sadness: ' a dimly lit window of my soul where something resides sleeping waiting to be awakened.. '
I feel I can never get tired of looking at it..
Thank you for the beautiful words and for the.. read moreI feel I can never get tired of looking at it..
Thank you for the beautiful words and for the encouragement, Emma! It means a lot to me 😊
Nice to meet another fellow cancerian 😊