Glassless Windows

Experimental.

They say:

"Eyes are the windows 

to one's soul."

But my windows;

they're glassless,

with only a frame.

I let you see,

what I want

to be seen.

And I avert

my eyes away

from your face.

Because the darkness

of my soul ...

would consume you

~ whole ~ 

Author's Note

Edited version.

Reviews

[LazerRays]

Glassless.... Ah. Very nice. A nice poem, Yumna. Does this mean the glass of your eyes have already been shattered prior to this poem? I'd make a greek mythology reference but ah, theyre boring anyways. Sigh. Idk why, i just like this. Too relateable.... Sigh. :(

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think that depends on who's looking into them..
Make the reference. I don't find it boring ;)
Thank you so much for reading and liking. Appreciated, as always, fp. x

[LazerRays]

Ah well it just reminded me of a couple myths (when you said turn away) it reminded me of Orpheus and how he went into the underworld playing music (he was talented) And convinced hades to bring his dead wife back and hades let him but he said to Orpheus to walk out of the underworld and dont look behind him at his wife until he reached outside. And Orpheus couldnt help at the last minute to look behind him because he dodnt hear his wife and got anxioud and looked. He lost her forever... Or how narcissus fell in love with his own reflection... Idk. And it was fun to read this, ml ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Uh. I already know a little about that narcissus myth but the first one is interesting too ;)
Lol you adorable thing :P thanks once again :D

[LazerRays]

Thank you thank you

[Giulia King]

"the darkness
of my soul would
consume you whole" I looove those lines!
It's better to have glass-less windows than to cover them with rose colored glasses :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Rightly said! Thank you so much 😊

[Nora]

"because, the darkness of my soul would consume u whole"
It created a strong impact..

Nice poem

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[OhSnapShley]

I like this piece. Nice work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[andrew mitchell]

Nice write, better to be a soul with depth than a window that's reflective. The eyes do have this soul attachment having a black iris. And we do show what we like to show.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I find it quite interesting to deceive people into believing what they see 😉
Thank you, Andrew, for sharing your thoughts here and for liking 😊

[V]

Interesting perception. Reminds me of see-through eyes but controlled by the possessor not by the observer. Nicely penned seems still a little raw to be honest but it's a lovely basis for a good poem.
Again nice image you chose for your piece. I stay away from adding images as I want the readers to create their own ones.. But my mind is always so full of intense imagery, I often think more than in others...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I feel privileged enough to know that I'm on both sides 😉
I agree, it's not complete. I had this idea tugging on the inside of my skull so I just wrote it out how it is..
About the images.. Well, I didn't either but these days, I've plenty of time to dispose of lol
Thank you for the kind comments and appreciation, Vanessa! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[V]

I abs understand. Sometimes it feels necessary to write it off your mind (and heart as so often in my case) I often do so too but since I'm an annoying perfectionist 😉, I only publish it when it reads at least close to something good. I'd never call my writings perfect though....😛

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I find your work quite inspiring but I think I've told you this before 😉
I've recently started to my heart's content before that it was crap haha 😂😂😂
And being a perfectionist ain't bad😉

[V]

Aaha..ok I caught you with my writings of the heart and now you tasted blood and want more lol. Jk.
That's nice to know though. I still believe the best writings come from the heart, realized by the restless mind 😉 ❤
No not always bad. Lol. I can't be any other way, either although again I try to keep myself at balance in terms of this too. Sometimes it's ok to not sound or be super shiny overly good or whatever. 😛😇

[V]

I meant to say anyways instead of either in the comment above 😶🙇

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahaha no! It wasn't you! It was the fact that people here thought either I'm totally lovesick or going through a heartbreak 😂😂😂 so I got tired of telling them it's not me I'm writing about lol but now I do.. 😛
I think whether a writing is good or not depends on how the reader takes it. Although of course it's about their capacity to understand too.
I would say I'm a perfectionist in planning out something. Like you know, the schedule, scheme and stuff. The rest I leave for as it goes..

[V]

Hm ok sorry I couldn't be your muse 😒lol. 😛

I agree to your words and now I'll look at writing down something for someone close. 😉

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha okay 😛😂