Glassless Windows

Experimental.

They say:

"Eyes are the windows 

to one's soul."

But my windows;

they're glassless,

with only a frame.

I let you see,

what I want

to be seen.

And I avert

my eyes away

from your face.

Because the darkness

of my soul ...

would consume you

~ whole ~ 

Author's Note

Edited version.

Reviews

[LazerRays]

Glassless.... Ah. Very nice. A nice poem, Yumna. Does this mean the glass of your eyes have already been shattered prior to this poem? I'd make a greek mythology reference but ah, theyre boring anyways. Sigh. Idk why, i just like this. Too relateable.... Sigh. :(

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think that depends on who's looking into them..
Make the reference. I don't find it boring ;)
Thank you so much for reading and liking. Appreciated, as always, fp. x

[LazerRays]

Ah well it just reminded me of a couple myths (when you said turn away) it reminded me of Orpheus and how he went into the underworld playing music (he was talented) And convinced hades to bring his dead wife back and hades let him but he said to Orpheus to walk out of the underworld and dont look behind him at his wife until he reached outside. And Orpheus couldnt help at the last minute to look behind him because he dodnt hear his wife and got anxioud and looked. He lost her forever... Or how narcissus fell in love with his own reflection... Idk. And it was fun to read this, ml ;)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Uh. I already know a little about that narcissus myth but the first one is interesting too ;)
Lol you adorable thing :P thanks once again :D

[LazerRays]

Thank you thank you

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Yes, the eyes are the lamp of ones heart, anything that may go through can affect such emotions

[Dr. YumnaKay]

True. Thank you for your thoughts here, Sire 😊

[CherryEllie]

very true. great piece of poetry. sometimes we fool people into thinking they know us when we only show them what we want to. beautiful. keep it up! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yeah, true indeed. Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this one :)

[CherryEllie]

no problem! can't wait for more :)

[Jonathan Osterman]

Very interesting poem. The metaphor you used is great and i'll defenitely remember it. Nice work :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for the appreciation. I'm glad you liked it :)

[Manu]

Beautifully written and melancholic at the same time, Yumna :-)
Quite an interesting take on eyes and it's beholder. I too somehow feel that eyes act as a window to one's soul but people tend to see on the basis of their own perceptions or by the way we are showing ourselves to them. I really liked the ending as it is giving out a very touching and heart felt reasoning.
I loved the fluidity and thought of this poem. Lovely piece :-) :-)

PS: Sometimes our writings too act as a window to our soul (just a thought)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I think so too, Gorthi. It seems somewhat easier to express yourself through words in a write than it is by verbally doing so. Something which I have to overcome lol 😛
Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts here and for liking! I truly appreciate and agree with your words 😊

[Jibey]

Others can often see into a person's soul more than they realise... and what to the individual seems dark, can be warm, mysterious and arousing...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's an interesting point. It could be if you have the eyes to see right through..
Thank you for the beautiful thoughts here 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. This poem is very thoughtful. Loved it.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you, Najam! So very kind of you to say :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You are welcome ☺

[Pete]

this is certainly an introspective view of onself. i like the honesty and truth in this. the sad conclusion is a little unnerving. deep on many levels. a good, creative write!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for your thoughts here and for liking! Truly appreciate it 😊

[Pete]

welcome. :)

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Hmm. Slightly menacing!

No need for an edit. Perfectly fine as it is. Your theme is a common occurrence in everyday life. For whatever reasons, we humans are very efficient at covering up our true selves. And only revealing this true self to those we deem worthy of that knowledge.

A lovely take on a universal idea, with a beautiful picture to go alongside it. Nicely written.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I might be adding to it, that's what I meant by editing..
I agree with you, it's quite easy how we deceive others..
Thank you, Doodley, for your thoughts and appreciation! It means a lot to me 😊

[Zia Doyle]

My windows,
they are glassless,
with only a frame - ah I love this so much! Clever metaphor and effective imagery here!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it 😊