Invisible To You

A sequel to "Shield"

Invisible to you 

Standing there in front of you

Yet your eyes see right 

through me.

Blurred, broken images form 

In my eyes

From the night when you said,

"It's all over, 

there is no 'us',

just 'you' and 'me', going our separate ways"

And I accept it. This numbing, yet ever present pain which resides in me like a malignant disease,

to which there is no cure.

And I accept it. This fate, a gift by you, the last thing that I'll have, 

that although I never moved from your sight 

yet I'm

Invisible to you...

Reviews

[matrixmark]

It's a sad thing when this happens to us, and can be very tough to deal with. But it is also better to have loved than never to have loved at all. (It means nothing at the time but as time goes by, we heal and start to reflect on things differently)

These moments happen to many of us. Yes...it breaks us down, but also it makes us stronger.

Some perfect choice of words in this piece. Well done....

Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree. Time is the best healer.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here and for the appreciation, Mark! It means a lot to me 😊

[matrixmark]

No worries, always a pleasure.
Mark.

[Saud Maroof]

Ah! one of the most common feelings of being lost and caped-camouflaged under the shadow of temporal misery.

Causes:
selflessness
love
excessive empathy

Symptoms:
Pain
sadness
(and utterly pure yet connivingly vivid art) Rare and Expensive

Control:
admire the reflection in the dimmest of lights
With time...


Heartbreak is common, but your poem was oddly heartwarming and satisfying. Your words made me smile.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you for the in depth assessment here. I'm glad it made you smile. 😊

[Saud Maroof]

thank you for sharing.

[Zia Doyle]

Oh this is wrenching and beautiful. No word is wasteful in this piece. My emotions had a little workout as I read it. I'll look forward to reading more of your work.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad it touched you. Thank you for the appreciation. It means a lot 😊

[V]

That's a deep one. Well-written, one of my favs by you, I think. I also really like the picture you chose for this piece, the missing head like a missing identity, a form of invisibility.
Sad topic though, sad because I can relate to the feeling...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I didn't write this from my point of view though yes I've felt like this at sometime. Maybe that's why the feeling came out fine.
This is something most can relate too although I can not at the time.
I'm glad you liked the depth in this one. Thank you 😊

[V]

Certainly relatable for many. There are some really good lines in it, you're very welcome. :)

[Jibey]

Such is the heartbreak of separation... captured so well here...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes it is ..
Thank you 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

Boy, haven't we all had this moment or moments in our loves history. I say it's worth the pain to love and lose than to never have loved at all. (I think someone else said that also) Yon convey the dread emotionn well.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

And I would say better to be lost and then love...
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here! I appreciate it 😊

[MsJewel]

"Invisible to you" unfortunately something I can relate to. Your poem is tenderly written and heartfelt. :) Julie

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I feel sad to hear that you can relate to this.
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Phill Oz O'fee]

This follow on from ‘Shield’ continues the theme of broken dreams, but in a more poignant poetical examination of a hurtful personal experience. Your write expresses a view from the perspective of the injured party. Whereas, the source of this wounded heart remains oblivios to the pain that is felt. Well done …

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes, that was the intention. I did not write this from my point of view..
Thank you! I'm glad it hit home and that you liked it. 😊

[Roxana Lica]

beautiful and touching, i love you work

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it 😊

[Diamond]

Yumna, a big wow!! It touches the heart very deeply and I love the flow.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you so much, Queen! I'm glad you liked it. Your appreciation really means a lot to me 😊

[Diamond]

My pleasure was to read. :)

[Diamond]

But I think, I haven't read shield yet....will check it out sometime.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Sure! Feel free 😊